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Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby hype » May 9th, '10, 23:27

Can we pretend that airplanes In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now (wish right now, wish right now)
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now (wish right now, wish right now)

i look into my heart and i see you right there
what am i supposed to do when i have these night mares
where i never see you again. feeling quiet scared
i sit and think about you, lost in black and white stares
thoughts are shooting through my mind going off like bright flares
you think it's quite fair after how i treated you
understandably you'd think that i never needed you
but i swear my love was true i always tried to see it through
i never meant for you to doubt it, it will always be with you. (yeah)
can i call you at night? and ask if you're alright?
can i hold your hand and show you all the stars above at night
'cause they shine so bright when you're with me, yeah, can i call you mine?
i would be so proud to have you right there by my side
i know i have a rep and you might think that you're in line
but i promise to you girl that you and me would do it right
i know that know you're skeptical i might tell another lie
but i swear to you right now you got me higher than the sky
and to tell you the truth, i never thought that you'd go
away like that and leave me alone freezing on my own.
if we tried again i'd try to be the best you've ever known
but i'd understand if you just wanna be left alone
we don't have to try again, if you want, i'd never phone
we'd live life on separate roads and girl we'd never know ..

Can we pretend that airplanes In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now (wish right now, wish right now)
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now (wish right now, wish right now)

i just read a card, the love letter that you sent
where you said you'd never leave me, but obviously you went.
to a certain extent, i know that i can't just pretend
that we can be alright and suddenly just make amends.
but is it such a crime that i want to turn the time
back to a time where we were fine, before the stupid lies
when it was you and i, right up against the world.
you know i want to be with you, i love my favourite girl.
ever since the night we parted, we've had some bad experiences
but we have found each other now, no more disappearances
you're the prettiest girl i know. whatever your appearance is
and if you come back to me you've fulfilled my dearest wish.

to be continued.
Last edited by hype on May 12th, '10, 01:42, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby Ticalrecords » May 10th, '10, 01:40

idk man seems kinda generic..not tht its bad or unusable, but u shud prolly jus scrap it n start off rhyming w somthin different then nightmares yk
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Re: Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby gutawafang » May 10th, '10, 02:01

That was good, Hype. It flows very very well to the beat. Pretty simple multis. Try to use some dope vocabulary. :happy:
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Re: Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby hype » May 12th, '10, 01:43

bump. EDITED FIRST POST.
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Re: Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby MC Anonymous » May 12th, '10, 01:46

Boring as fuck. I didn't like any of it, I've seen a particular person write with the same style over and over again so the shit is dry of substance. It's boring.
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Re: Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby hype » May 12th, '10, 01:48

okay, thanks for the constructive criticism.
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Re: Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby dR3 » May 12th, '10, 20:16

You suck Scotty boy tell em.
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Re: Airplanes In The Night Sky

Postby hype » May 12th, '10, 20:33

dR.dR3 wrote:You suck Scotty boy tell em.

the hypocrisy you bring to this board is second to none.
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