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The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Spyder » May 10th, '10, 01:38

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My time watching, observing, those undeserving
They come up early and fall just as surely, unworthy
Days they have cursed me, I live twice in every aspect
Every event, every address viewed through my tactics
An addiction, a habit, behold the Romans, the Catholics
I keep patrol as I stroll through the atlas,
Combing the map with, abilities that let him rewind
Ancient Egyptians I gaze from the skies as temples arise.
I invented this line we travel, and I cross quite common
As I strive with optics, Nostradamus my prophet.
Poverty and famine’s damage erects revolutions
Ive seen respect turn to mutinies as they test Rasputin
A hellish mutant, a tragedy marked all across charts
Whole lots slaughtered as the Holocaust starts,
Ive seen pain, agony, envy, lust and then greed
Kings topple from riches as if thrust from a steed.
From what I have seen, the earth will soon be no more
The wars just support there is a doomsday in store.

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In the future, country's expand, and each of their borders strays,
There's beauty told by Venus, but Earth ignores her praise,
There is no black or white, they're gone to only teach grey,
And each day, I think watches are affecting my ink blotches,
The pyramids have come and gone, with the sun and dawn,
And if you aren't prepared to see them gone, run along,
Because the nine wonders, are now nine tragedies forgotten,
All the forest are, repeated fires and sad trees more rotton,
The future holds no clocks, no watches, no time of season,
No couplets, no haikus, and there is no rhyme or reason,
But in a sence, I'm wondering if we truely have innocence,
When all churches are lost, I'm wondering how our sin repents,
I saw the moon and sun, one has died in a flicker of light,
Finally, because all their existence they just would bicker and fight,
Unfortunately, the future is non existent, just the past repeated,
But, no matter if it doesn't exist, I'll always ask to see it,
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Ticalrecords » May 10th, '10, 01:45

haha spyder sounds like ur channeling nas's spirit on tht one, but it was good raps w historical references n shit make u think for a second. FAQ, love that "Unfortunately, the future is non existent, just the past repeated", but one or two bars didnt match up, what was ink blotches supposed to rhyme with?
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby classthe_king » May 10th, '10, 01:51

Pretty good collab. Spyder when you started off I was like ehhhh but the second half was dope. Fa-q your's was solid throughout, like Coleon said that last bar was amazing. I liked to see this.
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Spyder » May 10th, '10, 02:04

thanks for the feed everyone :b:
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby SliK » May 10th, '10, 02:11

Ticalrecords wrote:haha spyder sounds like ur channeling nas's spirit on tht one, but it was good raps w historical references n shit make u think for a second. FAQ, love that "Unfortunately, the future is non existent, just the past repeated", but one or two bars didnt match up, what was ink blotches supposed to rhyme with?

And each day, I think watches are affecting my ink blotches

Good verses by both of you IMO, very enjoyable.
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Spyder » May 10th, '10, 02:58

thanks bro :y:
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Fa-Q » May 10th, '10, 04:24

Spyder wrote:thanks bro :y:

dude, Spy we killed this
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Spyder » May 10th, '10, 21:27

no doubt, we'll collab again :smoking:
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby classthe_king » May 10th, '10, 21:30

Spyder wrote:no doubt, we'll collab again :smoking:


Don't you have another collab to be working on :unsure:
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Spyder » May 10th, '10, 21:31

bro i be shittin em out like boom boom pow :shifty:
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby dR3 » May 10th, '10, 22:07

The two best writers on here.

Brilliant job guys, keep it up.
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Spyder » May 11th, '10, 00:44

wow thanks for the love dre :worship:
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Tash8 » May 11th, '10, 00:48

wow pretty impressed by ur flow spyder..both have pretty good rhymes and i like the complexity, especially the vocab.
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby Fa-Q » May 11th, '10, 05:28

Thanks Tash and damn Spy, we got props from Emin3m himself :D
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Re: The Observer ft. Fa-Q

Postby MC Anonymous » May 11th, '10, 19:43

Spyder: Beginning of the verse turned me off, but the middle/end was straight fire! I enjoyed it a lot. Rhyme scheme was solid and everything else was solid. A solid verse.

Fa-Q: I didn't like yours as much as Spyder's because a lot of the rhyming is predictable, you tend to use the same multies in different scenarios, and it's OK, just not as fresh as it COULD be, you feel me? The verse itself was good, I was able to read the whole thing without stopping so the flow was nice also.

Decent collab, can't wait to read more. :y:
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