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Postby classthe_king » Jun 13th, '10, 20:14

I was bored so I made this real quick

I’m on a roll like scotch and I will finally own my spot
The flow I got has more spins then your whole IPod
I’m past the braggin, come on, this clash has to happen
I’m the best man you got less fans then Alaskan Cabins
I bask in rappin, you’re done, I won’t promise immunity
Your albums sell like light bulbs in Amish communities
Be honest with you and me, my skill, you will never top it
My verse has got more hotlines then the Trevor project
I won’t ever stop it, you’re over when we begin to feud
The best song on your album was the Sentus Interlude
So fuck these gangsters, packin there heat but won’t show
Their faces, fuck it, I sleep on the streets like hobos
If you are facin me you won’t go, I always go harder
Plus you poor on the lines like a Road Marker
I’m so sick that when I’m performing on the stage
They put the surgeon general’s warning on the page
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Free Verse

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 13th, '10, 20:19

very gritty stuff bro
pretty nice for a free verse
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Re: Free Verse

Postby classthe_king » Jun 13th, '10, 22:37

Thanks
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Re: Free Verse

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 13th, '10, 23:47

no....THANK YOU :angry:
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Re: Free Verse

Postby classthe_king » Jun 14th, '10, 04:55

YOUR WELCOME :angry:
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Re: Free Verse

Postby gutawafang » Jun 14th, '10, 07:39

I'm fucking sure this is inspired by Canibus. :shifty: I see some common lines. :shifty:

Nevertheless, it's pretty good flow. Nice structure. Multis is sick as usual. :y:
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Re: Free Verse

Postby classthe_king » Jun 14th, '10, 14:30

gutawafang wrote:I'm fucking sure this is inspired by Canibus. :shifty: I see some common lines. :shifty:

Nevertheless, it's pretty good flow. Nice structure. Multis is sick as usual. :y:


What lines did Canibus use?
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Re: Free Verse

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 14th, '10, 19:17

classthe_king wrote:YOUR WELCOME :angry:


Your so well mannered :-) :console:
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Re: Free Verse

Postby classthe_king » Jun 18th, '10, 15:45

DƎRDYPK wrote:
classthe_king wrote:YOUR WELCOME :angry:


Your so well mannered :-) :console:

;)
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Re: Free Verse

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 18th, '10, 15:46

:heart:
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Re: Free Verse

Postby Spyder » Jun 19th, '10, 03:31

shit was tight man, the amish line looked like an old one of mine :whistle: but naw its a bit different

some nice lines in there man
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Re: Free Verse

Postby gutawafang » Jun 22nd, '10, 02:41

classthe_king wrote:
gutawafang wrote:I'm fucking sure this is inspired by Canibus. :shifty: I see some common lines. :shifty:

Nevertheless, it's pretty good flow. Nice structure. Multis is sick as usual. :y:


What lines did Canibus use?

not really a whole line. but the phrase "whole ipod". LOL. :sweating:
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Re: Free Verse

Postby classthe_king » Jun 22nd, '10, 19:29

Thanks Spyder
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Re: Free Verse

Postby Solace » Jun 28th, '10, 04:39

Aha you recorded this with the Slaughter verse...Great stuff. You're improving your punchlines pretty fast.

The flow I got has more spins then your whole IPod
I’m the best man you got less fans then Alaskan Cabins
The best song on your album was the Sentus Interlude
Your albums sell like light bulbs in Amish communities

And the list goes on haha. Keep it Class.
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Re: Free Verse

Postby Just Silver » Jun 28th, '10, 04:41

Alaskan Cabin line was ill :worship:
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