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just lemme kick a rhyme....

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just lemme kick a rhyme....

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 26th, '10, 22:58

My girl's napping so I wrote a rhyme real quick.........

You know what they say? where there's smoke there's fire!
You think you getting lifted? I'm always getting higher :smoking:
I can't quit the weed rap you should already believe that
untill I'm lying in the grave everyday Imma need a fat
blunt of the best that I can smoke till I'm dead
it keeps my sperm strong enough to blow a hole in your head
Is that a punchline? naw.....is it? I'm clueless
99% of the time I was baked & forget I could do this
magic with a pen I'm reakin havoc once again
I'm pissed off....alone...iv had it with my friends
I only need the pen & the women of my dreams
if you have my trust it's whatever but this life's not what it seems
it's all just a mindfuck....that's why I spark the dro
but Imma cuddle wit my girl..fuck this rhyme I gotta go
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Re: just lemme kick a rhyme....

Postby wrestler1256 » Jun 27th, '10, 08:23

dope, i love the opening lines
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Postby Emadyville » Jun 27th, '10, 17:52

great read, gflowed well till the last 4 bars, but the whole thing was dope :y:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


I love you Daren
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Re: just lemme kick a rhyme....

Postby Solace » Jun 28th, '10, 04:33

-Steven- wrote:Multis and Flow. :worship:


Now that's when you know somebody is just dickriding.

It was an alright keystyle, below par, and you've done a lot better but I know this isn't serious work so whatever it's all good.
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