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Spend Some Time FreeVerse

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Spend Some Time FreeVerse

Postby ThomasJ » Jul 1st, '10, 18:21

Yo...I remember a long time ago,when I knew this girl,she was my diamond,so
I never let another prick lay his hands on her,if anybody talk shit they get their legs & arms bruised
Spending time with her over my friends I'd choose,they'd turn their backs on me like "That's a fool"
And I took it with a smile,but the actu-al,fact was my life was suffering thanks to her
But I was scared to say it,'cause I really loved this girl,and I thought she loved me back,and I trusted her
And I never thought that she would do that to me,"Dude can't you see? You're acting irrationally!"
All the time she was fucking other dudes,and all I ever wanted her to do is...

Girl voice:
Spend some time with me...

I wrote this real quick yesterday... Nothin' special...
Tell me what you think :happy:
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Spend Some Time FreeVerse

Postby Robbie G » Jul 1st, '10, 18:29

it's not bad but it should be structured into lines so it's easier to read.
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Re: Spend Some Time FreeVerse

Postby ThomasJ » Jul 1st, '10, 18:32

LOL Thanks I guess :flower:
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Spend Some Time FreeVerse

Postby J Roc » Jul 2nd, '10, 01:02

wtf was that :zipped:
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