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Never Quit (New Spit)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 3rd, '10, 03:04

no wants to be near this sick shit
i could make you quit, its only the wit
that makes me do such shit, its legit
hit right off the bat, right into the mitt
your lighting my spirt, like thunder at night, you emit
dont ask me to remit, man im not God
bitch i send ya fucking ass to riyadh
with a big ass can of green pea pods
say "go catch a alaskan cod with some petard"
or rub ya face on a path of es pla nade
eat it, shit it out, treat it like an olympic-god
im hercules, bitch forget that odd firing squad
bullets bounce off me, like im the incredible hulk
i aint green cause im jealous, im green cause im sulk
bitch dont start to skulk you folk dont avoid no shit
cause this is bullet_boy hes never gonna submit to it
drill me with a drill bit, no matter what i still wont commit to it
i will not slit my wrist, bitch i will never quit until i say thats it.....


as you see the flow gets a little bigger (in my mind i rapped a little more faster so yea :wave: ) please tell me what you think, im still rusty but i think i may have cracked through the shell here :flower:
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Re: Never Quit

Postby Solace » Jul 3rd, '10, 03:20

What is with the - in every line. You're not going Roccy with any multies so whats the point.
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Re: Never Quit

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 3rd, '10, 03:26

Solace wrote:What is with the - in every line. You're not going Roccy with any multies so whats the point.

fixed shit :whistle:
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Re: Never Quit

Postby Solace » Jul 3rd, '10, 03:29

I was just wondering why you wrote it like that lol, like was there a reason or...?
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Re: Never Quit

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 3rd, '10, 03:31

Solace wrote:I was just wondering why you wrote it like that lol, like was there a reason or...?
i thought it would make it look more complex, but it made me loo like im two and didnt know how to use a space bar :unsure:
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Re: Never Quit

Postby classthe_king » Jul 3rd, '10, 03:39

wait, were you the one that was suppossed to be X'd up
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Never Quit

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 3rd, '10, 03:42

well i dont bite anymore, that was my last time, sooo... :unsure:
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Re: Never Quit

Postby ChronicJon » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:07

classthe_king wrote:wait, were you the one that was suppossed to be X'd up

No that one was 2sDay :'(
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Re: Never Quit

Postby Solace » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:15

classthe_king wrote:wait, were you the one that was suppossed to be X'd up

No he just sucks a lot.
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Re: Never Quit

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:16

Solace wrote:
classthe_king wrote:wait, were you the one that was suppossed to be X'd up

No he just sucks a lot.

yea :unsure: i actually thought i did good here, but i still fail :facepalm
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Re: Never Quit (New Spit)

Postby Solace » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:18

You can't just be shit in one piece, and amazing the next. It happens over time. :coffee:
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Re: Never Quit (New Spit)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:23

i knew that :coffee:
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Re: Never Quit (New Spit)

Postby ChronicJon » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:24

You guys have a love/hate thing going on? :unsure:
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Re: Never Quit (New Spit)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:25

yup
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Re: Never Quit (New Spit)

Postby Solace » Jul 3rd, '10, 04:29

Well I dislike him but I try to give unbiased feedback anyways. :whistle:
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