Relentless

[bullet_boy46]

someone said its a little better then what i usually drop here it is:

ill rip rappers backs spines paralyzing them instantly
left non-existent like the concept of paradise during infancy
keep talkin shit and watch my timb check ya prostate
damn more people switching to him than allstate
i stone cold stunn em when im feeling ostentacios
no room for you on top though it's vast and spacious
simple ass jack sit in a box im outstanding
all these locals im out gunnin and out manning
take a page from peyton's book or book of eli start praying
youll never make it to the pro bowl thats all im sayin
ill twist an arm and disparage ya, find a physical therapist
you all will think im al quaida from the way ima tear a wrist (terrorist)
all these pups small in size call their bluffs compromised
just say there ass fucked with a chain because they just saw demise (sodomise)
demolish and stomp a dream, conquer and squash esteem
run rappers over like a field by two world cup soccer teams
damn...its over

fuck it

*FIXED ONE LINE

[bullet_boy46]

Way better than the other one.

For the saw demise line, I suggest adding in a saw reference. Chains, blades, or something else to make it even better than it is.

you got that punch though right

[bullet_boy46]

lol thanks, i still have alot of punches left, ima use them wisely

i tried to step up my punch use..now i gotta work on the flow, and multis...

[bullet_boy46]

Way better than the other one.

For the saw demise line, I suggest adding in a saw reference. Chains, blades, or something else to make it even better than it is.

you got that punch though right

Yes, it was pretty clever.

thanks, i added something about "ass fucked with a chain" but it looks odd