Fa-Q - My Caricature

[Fa-Q]

Damnit, I posted this earlier but it got lost in stupid ass beefs that don't mean anything....take those to the battle sections...fuck


I am stuck on earth, yet I know I have a mission to mars,
And I've been struck since birth, now I'm kissing the stars,
If I drew myself, I'd be walking this road, missin the cars,
Fighting each car that zooms by, with my fist in my bars,
Whispers in shadows quickly fade, yet I'm hearing voices,
I try to make decisions, for some reason I'm fearing choices,
My blue eyes, seem to condemn everyone, they patronize,
I've convinced God used my eyes, to paint the skies,
Aint it wise, to know I've fall, because I'll faint then rise,
I know I'm original, individual, like sun rises and sets,
I know, money is for naught, days spent, is our prized and bets,
Life can not be squandered, so I searched and found a use,
It was next to some dust, papers, and a poison brown recluse,
I'm trying my best to seek life, instead of hiding kills,
So I'll expose this cold world, with my writing skills,
Peaks and valleys, always leave me fighting hills,


I see flower beds flourishing, but theres wilted glum rose pedals,
I am made of mental metal, I have built and composed metals,
In a time of war, some live and die, and some chose medals,
Will I be a wise man, because the wisest man heeds sayers,
Will I pass churches, because the slyest man needs prayers,
My over exaggerated smile, sees 50,000 smiles a day,
Past the horizon, see them from 50,000 miles away
Its meant to be like that, they build planned high sight steeples,
The flowers beside the church, wilt and die like peoples,
And I smile, when I could have given, jewelry instead of memories,
Each morning, that's an everyday renewal the dead loves enemies,
Over exaggerated eyes, not proportionate, filled with tears,
It took them months, but when its all said and done, build in years,
I want inside, because inside that safe building they killed their fears,
So how long does it take, until you start to hate your face,
How many robberies, until you start to gate your place,


Every sound I use, makes my anxious, sweating hands wait,
Each of them look for ruins, and hyrogliphs to translate,
I write thousands of blueprints, and wait for my plans fate,
Anger? I have the black panthers, and Ku Klux Klan's hate,
I'll have dry lips, thirst for more, until every dam breaks,
I'll crash into every car, and just blame it on the damn brakes,
I want to see the pearls and beauty, each and every clam takes,
I'm just a cartoon, they have me smiling when I feel sadness,
They have me in a nut house, straight jacket, to heal madness,
And they give me a journal, I hope that my diary stays,
But I'll set this world on fire, leaving my journal I fiery blaze,
So this proves, I don't want my caricature from a street vendor,
They show I have skinny legs, that my long feet hinder,
I fall, then spring because I always try to beat winter,
My beautiful bride is drawing this hideous, and ugly caricature,
Yet she kisses me, misses me, and then she'll hug me stairin at her,

[Drama Setter]

Nice drop bro , i like it

My blue eyes, seem to condemn everyone, they patronize,
I've convinced God used my eyes, to paint the skies,

[Fa-Q]

Thanks DS

[Solace]

Damnit, I posted this earlier but it got lost in stupid ass beefs that don't mean anything....take those to the battle sections...fuck

You're one to talk?



Great piece though. You have a way with vivid imagery. Your multies were consistent, no doubt did they run along smooth too. Perfect flow. And 3 verses just made it better, most people are lazy but you drop consistent in terms of both quality and quantity. Also you have a good diction, I've noticed...Keep at it Faaackyou.

And LOL@you have this piece posted three times...

[Fa-Q]

Thanks a lot Solace

[gutawafang]

It's more like talking than rapping here. I don't like the rhyme pattern of 3 by 3.

Like

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Hard to flow because of that. Multis didn't help no matter how fucking dope it is. But the vocabulary used is fucking good. Nice metpahors too.

[Fa-Q]

Thanks guta...and sometimes I liked to write in triplets instead of couplets...I understand the flow might be off a little bit...thanks for the feed

[Fa-Q]

Bump

[Just Silver]

Really nice had good structure IMO

and overall everything fit right to the point

[bullet_boy46]

lol @ beefs, its me and CJ, im ready to win lol, but anyways


this was nice shit, especially the multis

great

[Fa-Q]

Damn thanks BB, Frank and Silverlining