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My new stupid shit

Postby Lupidshwoopshh » Jul 8th, '10, 04:57

Yeah alright kid I mike tyson it punch lines snuff huff puff rhymes up ur nose
Bite off ya earlobe til u dimensionally thinkin it implodes...stupid is stupid goes
Exploded n I go so so half assed and half wits? end? you comin at me from
One end weighs none, the other weighs a fuuuu uh ckin shit ton
Ashes fall sift n swift like Volcanic eruption in the dome skit tripz
Blow up ya mind like crimes in the waves super sonic cut and paste
Drag on a cigarette inhale it away burnt down here ya go butt in ur face
Mental state disgraced a waste of time and space the pace of the awe raw
catch the pitch speed ball curve oh look!"> a pigeon all words off the tip, from the third word in<
N I'm nicklin cents I got more than the average two ta put in, <
in ya brain while the music play fiddle on the roof it's as...mice to a maze
True to the truth too to the tooth take it n bury
I'll airy the air see fairy see hear c clearly watch the words about gay and marry s-er-ious-ly!
I'm a monster conjoured bring the kittens to kiddin the whole kit n kaboodlin
from off beat odd words a stop and a stir snobbed the words clobbered nerves on on on
pathological liar i'll morph into chromesones birth be grown til I'm gone goin home a heart
from dark from start from scartch it's chicken fast
ripped or cut off from cap to neck of flesh gone...it as the wind
empaSIS on the wrong SYllaBLe when I begin I might as well ink in sink in
of the souls cuz I'm stronger in my number split it's personal
to much beef to drop not mad begot...and sad so we thought
hittin head on the walls all balls off all dropped in awe it's as if they saw jaws
I'ma dust dusk disintegrated unknown of and blown up
goin fockin completely nots i'm nuts as fuck mustered up
sailin straight into a trucker mother fucker not another
Pierce in the side of my ship spaced out slam dunk sunken
drunken seagul wheres the stork we need bailin out n now
peter pan finished em off the dead head on collision
I think he'd knowck me into the next mellenineminum
Never never land oh shwoop I was just talk bout peter pan
never say never again but I'll never give up never never again
other than that I stomp cats pussy trapped weak ass fart a lil mo queef ass beat grass!!!
stomp da feet on the feat...ure of me cap...tured moments recaptured zone in!
the flock flown in Am I gettin stoned again!?! Pelicans droppin bombs pebbles closen in!
:b: :b: :b: :b: :b: :b: :b: :angry: :b: :b: :b: :b: :smoking: be back again I see what u mean by structure though like right cloumned all the way down both sides
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Re: My new stupid shit

Postby Element. » Jul 8th, '10, 20:39

You need to sort out your structure alot..
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Re: My new stupid shit

Postby Lupidshwoopshh » Jul 8th, '10, 21:07

I see if I had time right now I would be on it straight up but yet so and however I have to run around I'll be back later check by tomorrow might have better structure
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Re: My new stupid shit

Postby Element. » Jul 8th, '10, 21:20

Lupidshwoopshh wrote:I see if I had time right now I would be on it straight up but yet so and however I have to run around I'll be back later check by tomorrow might have better structure



I will just do an example of two lines with multi's and structure,


Loadin up food bitch, you never wanna stop the eatin'
so much fat, don't need radiators, im'a swap the heatin'

you see structure here is good and the multis are alryt not the best but it was rushed just to show ya.

Stop the eatin'
Swap the heatin'

Stop eatin'
Swap heatin'

only reason I done "the" in it was so it made the flow better and to make more sense of it.
and make sure when you do multi's it has the same amount of syllables.
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