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Determined in Shape

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Determined in Shape

Postby Just Silver » Jul 9th, '10, 04:20

Determined im in shape for lyrical rape
Hearin your name, makes me more geared for this game
Tears for the pain, but my ducts bloodstained
A cup of lung strength, spit calling one name
Bootcamp for the wicked hooks can't be the sickness
I do "Multis" like a "dog" listen
I take words slice 'em into different intentions
"Down to the letter" like Im "Missing a sentence"
I have had electrolytes fill my pen on them Techno nights
Im infested lice bugging these tested sites
Cuz thats the guy, yes this is I
A guest to me is I guess a beef
Turn around and give this guest my cheeks
Im too depressed to breath so I spit and wheeze
Give them a "hook" like I split a "C"
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Re: Determined in Shape

Postby gutawafang » Jul 9th, '10, 04:25

Last line is unique. :y: Didn't really have flow. Multis were not so good too. Structure is bad. But for a keystyle, it's quite okay. :y:
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Re: Determined in Shape

Postby Just Silver » Jul 9th, '10, 04:34

gutawafang wrote:Last line is unique. :y: Didn't really have flow. Multis were not so good too. Structure is bad. But for a keystyle, it's quite okay. :y:

Thanks thats what it was

this was just what i call a bump piece to basically advertise my other ones
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