I mean. Is there too much going on? I'm just wanting to know everyone's opinion and thoughts and all that on this. It's just something I wrote. Hey, I even get bored from time to time. And who don't have room for improvement. The last half of it, I pretty much threw together very quick. Why it is a lot more simple than the of the first half. I just wanna see what you all pick up on and catch and all that good shit in mainly the first part. Where is seems busy. I'll explain more on what I mean or want if needed later. Hell I may even go through and change something myself or fix it, and probably will at some point. Seeing how I'm the type who will always go through and try and change something. But for now..
And I will admit now. It's got a weird flow. So I tried typing it out below a little different to get it to come across the way I want it to. It may be just one of those things that needs to be heard. And most likely will. But whatever.
So.. Here ya go.
Like a cyclone rated C-five, thrown inside a corked, thick-carbonated-fuel-bottle,
I'll survive...A tycoon I strive to become soon,
a model a top my throne.. I'll reside adored and in-tune. Idiotic-Hatred-you'll-twaddle..
I thrive. For these 'Narcotic pain pill' -
bottles of these hydrocodones and Norco's that'll create the quick torque needed
to inflict trouble in-vain.
To drive Full Throttle...to compose these wicked-sick chaotic flows,
as I arrive in my zone, underrated and unknown.
'Til got you addicted, I won't stop spittin' this un-restricted psychotic shit, hoes.
You're afflicted and I'm the antibiotic, bitch. 'No love' is all I'll ever show.
Til I got your necks' being constricted in these clenched fists.
Wrenching and flexing my wrists is all it takes til it twists and breaks
Committin mistakes may just consist of you being found dead in a trench or a lake.
That's it as of this second.