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[Xray]

Very poetic. It was nice all around, except for the two times you used shit like "uhh" and "ahh". The first one, "uhh" worked. The second one, was like, I was trying to capture the image and then you add "ahh" it was like reading your orgasm no offense lmao.

Really liked this piece. Def poetic and not rap.

[Xray]

Yeah I assumed it had something to do with the flow.

I just peeped your other thread, in your sig (Walk Away) and what a time to change your sig lmao. Luckily I have it open still, to finish reading. But the thing you said about, forced multi's hindering the flow, amen to that. I agree 100%. I've been saying that to myself for the last couple months. IT DOES make artist's seem amatuer. Because everyone uses it, people think it's the shit to hop on the wagon and do the same, that's where most artist's go wrong, following trends... Anyways dude, you are on some genius shit no doubt, took me a while to realize it. But damn, you should really think about doing writing as a job, whether poetry, hip hop, film, whatever. Cause you got mad talent as a writer.

[Xray]

Yeah I assumed it had something to do with the flow.

I just peeped your other thread, in your sig (Walk Away) and what a time to change your sig lmao. Luckily I have it open still, to finish reading. But the thing you said about, forced multi's hindering the flow, amen to that. I agree 100%. I've been saying that to myself for the last couple months. IT DOES make artist's seem amatuer. Because everyone uses it, people think it's the shit to hop on the wagon and do the same, that's where most artist's go wrong, following trends... Anyways dude, you are on some genius shit no doubt, took me a while to realize it. But damn, you should really think about doing writing as a job, whether poetry, hip hop, film, whatever. Cause you got mad talent as a writer.

Damn, thanks bro. Coming from you that means a lot. (I know how stubborn you are at giving props, haha). But yeah, man.. I'm working with Maybe, we've been doing shows and shit. We're putting out an EP soon and will hopefully get some video up of our shows in NY once he's here. I'm persuing Hip hop as a career. I can't explain how much I've elevated while working with him. My writing, my flow, everything. Nobody has heard my new delivery and stuff yet. Anyone can call me a dick rider, but what I'm saying is true so I don't care. Again, thanks a lot man.

EDIT: Also, I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels that (about the multies)..

No problem man. Best of luck with everything man and hopefully Maybe doesn't pull another Detox on our asses, so we get to peep it. You do come off as a dick rider, but it's not your fault really, you get too much shit coming your way and you try to expain shit, so I get you. I get the fact you dudes know eachother in real life, so it's understandable, and it removes the dick rider image. Especially since you work on music together, there's nothing like working with another artist that feels pretty much the same way you feel, no homo.

[Fa-Q]

Was this written in crayon, because I'm assuming a child wrote this.

[Rain Matrix]

this is nice... damn man you pieced it together well