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Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

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Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 13th, '10, 01:56

If you sit and wonder for long enough, and you smoke a blunt,
The strong stuff, it’ll feel like you provoke the hunt
You choke and grunt, and wonder, if it pleases vandals,
Knowing they don’t have to walk in Jesus’ sandals,
Is it easier to follow deer’s fawn prints, with a clear conscience,
They look under Christmas trees, seeing Nintindos,
To Santa, children ask list these please, where the sin goes,
Where ever the wind blows, they enter through ten windows,
Finally through the entrance, the smile, and the grin shows,
Each of the men knows, and knew the sentence, they sell souls,
Its in the deepest parts of hell’s holes, where the swell folds,
The fingerprints, matter not but on the other hand their finger tips,
Have the individuality of a monumentous singer’s lips,
And inside the bedroom, pitbulls, knock when they bark,
Or do they bark when they knock, is it a walk in the park,
If they have nothing to hide, how come they talk in the dark,


Alleyways are market places, rabid dogs bark at faces,
Where kings, queens, and jokers, jack to target aces,
They ramble off languages, mixed and mashed, gibberish,
Is a gamble, soft anguishes, smaller fish eaten by bigger fish,
It’s rigorous, their contacts a crooked bunch, I figure this,
Green, blue, and brown are what’s in the eyes of crooks,
But sometimes the canned food turns and fries the cooks,
Can you hear the puppeteers, laughter, but corrupt sneers,
They never admire stone architecture, they just love arrows,
So they must mark the fletcher, a mix of dove sparrows,
White with blood, what will they hide the grave site with mud,
That’s simple enough, but the way they hide it isnt mere art,
It’s where Michelangelo’s worst fears start, and peers part,
Crooks have their broken hearts, plus David’s and Mona Lisa’s,
The ring the mono tone is creases, to them it is sewn in pieces,
Crooks must play keep away, but just while you sleep today,

If I looked into the irises, if I look into the blue eyes of the crook,
Where the patience and deceit is, and where it lies when you look,
Are there tears still, if the tears don’t get him, then the fears will,
How do they feel, knowing they’re contributing to this fowl nation,
Jail time failed crime, for spots are spots on a dalmation,
The escape, is best part, in the eyes of a crook, it’s a pardoned devil,
Each new house or bank, to them it is such like a hardened level,
Where pawn shops, are carnivals, for carnivores, come in intervals,
Thinking one step ahead, its fall wondering what the winter holds,
Where that sharpened shard of wood, the tiniest of splinter dulls,
With the silence of libraries, the silence of graves, fenced bastards,
Coupled with knowing they have violence of slaves against masters,
Where broken glass, is an everyday sight, an every day fight,
To never get caught, don’t leave any traces, the many faces,
Disguised with disguises and knives the size of a cook,
So let us all just quickly look, into the eyes of a crook,
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby TR shady » Aug 13th, '10, 03:16

Knowing they don’t have to walk in Jesus’ sandals, - That's a good line, I like it.

On Topic: It was a good read. Your a good writer.
This is for your sin's I cleanse you/ you could repent, but I warn-you if you continue/ to hell I send you. & just then the win blew and I said..
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 14th, '10, 18:14

Thanks Geno and "TR Shady"
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Just Silver » Aug 14th, '10, 18:24

Where kings, queens, and jokers, jack to target aces, :y:

Quite a few catchy lines

the subject seems to be a lot different from what you normally write about

:8) Good read
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 18th, '10, 21:02

thanks Silv
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 19th, '10, 15:49

lol my bad for finally gettin around to feedin this. Yeah like Silv said alot of good catchy lines, my fav was prolly the line Silver had. Just dope man really cool concept hit me up about the other piece I ot my verse rready
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 19th, '10, 22:06

Haha thanks Jus, yea I did that artistic look at alcoholics and so I wanted an artistic look at a thief
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby mcZu » Aug 19th, '10, 22:09

Like some said before me, it's good. I like it, even if it isn't the usual Fa-Q piece. Good job, keep it up.
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 21st, '10, 03:15

Thanks Zu
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 21st, '10, 06:22

Dont be mad SiiNide that you suck dick at writing songs
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 21st, '10, 07:31

SiiNiDE wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:Dont be mad SiiNide that you suck dick at writing songs


LOL. I'm your idol's idol.

Haha, you get no respect on this site....who got the black name cunt
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 21st, '10, 12:13

:facepalm
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby classthe_king » Aug 21st, '10, 19:33

You have the biggest ego of anyone
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 21st, '10, 19:36

SiiNide, you dont even rhyme most of the time
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Re: Fa-Q - In The Eyes Of A Crook

Postby classthe_king » Aug 21st, '10, 19:39

Fa-Q wrote:SiiNide, you dont even rhyme most of the time


SiiNide wrote:I do rhyme alot it's just not in the same traditional way that everyone else uses. My pieces are in fact litered with multis I just choose to disguise them because I don't let multi's control my verse, I let my delicate word choice and emotion do that
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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