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[Weather Man]

One day I was left being solitary,
Only thing I kept seeing in my eyes was a snowstorm heading my way,
Why am I in this mess ?
Was it because I was being un-sociable ?
Or was it because I was a regicide
I was just protecting my pride,
The only thing I could hide is my true feelings,
But these feelings I hide inside me, are so radical,
But I don't know if I should keep hiding them or spill them out, because it's making me feel rankle
Maybe I need to see a professional
Either way, my life is done for,
& it has nothing to do with this snow storm
But at that moment I felt like god,
There's no way to end this,
So i'm gonna drop this pen and enter the dark abyss.


(Just a little something that just came in my head right now. Not very good I know)

[Just Silver]

your gonna have to work on structure it can't flow well with horrible structure
keep writing though

[Solace]

Amazing work, one of the best pieces on the forum

[Weather Man]

I think I was just conscetrating to much on trying to make it rhyme but it just turned out complete whack now that I re-read it .. Any way thanks for the feedbacks guys. Great sarcasm there solace maybe u should try using that more in the future because when people read it . It makes people think u r actually giving them a good feeling inside way to go homiE

[Solace]

Anytime man, anytime.

[Weather Man]

Anytime man, anytime.

Word.

[Solace]

But to give some honest feed, it was bad but for a beginner you have great vocabulary, so keep heading that direction because you have major potential.

[Weather Man]

But to give some honest feed, it was bad but for a beginner you have great vocabulary, so keep heading that direction because you have major potential.

Thank you Mr.Solace, I am working on a another thing right now..

[Weather Man]

Thanks, McMaybe

[Drama Setter]

That was tight bro , you got talent

[Weather Man]

That was tight bro , you got talent

Sarcasm ?

[Tash8]

Yeahh, the rhymes really need to step up but overall i thought it was ok...

[Weather Man]

Yeahh, the rhymes really need to step up but overall i thought it was ok...

Thanks yo