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Dead Wrong Keystyle

Postby mcZu » Aug 29th, '10, 22:46

This is bound to be catastrophic
Bountiful charismatic, rhetorical acrobatic
Not just under your fabric with my speech
My bar-be disrespecting B, ask Eric
I’m eccentric though rational
Hungry like a cannibal on a diet
Always have a plan like Hannibal
Lyrics flammable not edible
Words move in high decibels
You’ll get fractioned like decimals
You’re just terrible, just read a bull-
Shit article about how radical
Hip Hop is... Not Pop ish
I be going deep I define what the mob is
People think that Lust is what Love is
But trust this, it’s by far bits
Of trust that mark bliss
So I carved this while listening to Ice-T no Lipton
I’m so dope, when I ride I get arrested like Paris Hilton
I don’t need to be tested
My lyrics reach people like I faxed it
Nobody can save you I hacked it
So you can ask me what’s crackalackin?
I’m back with the rapping acting
As I should like the rapping back in
The golden era when they were packing facts in
Verses, check the facts, they’re lacking tact in
Their verses, they’re slacking when they’re attacking
I’m hacking a track in pieces when I’m tracking a hack in
I’m on deck in an attacking mode not backpacking
Though traveling with who? Ask Inspectah Deck in
A Tweet, when I be backing the truth
The ignorant youth thinks they’re having a blast
I just attack them with a circular blast
‘cause I don’t hold back like a vertebra cast
I’m not what’s popular
Nor what’s popping, bra
I think I’m stopping bra
Enough for ya...
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
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Re: Dead Wrong Keystyle

Postby Ąbsølute » Aug 30th, '10, 00:39

I liked it a lot man!

I could see how a verse like this could fit into Dead Wrong
I liked the style of the piece and I think it was definitely a
good choice to go the direction you did with it.

Keep it up.
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Re: Dead Wrong Keystyle

Postby mcZu » Aug 31st, '10, 00:54

Thanks, appreciate it, man. If you want me to return feed, just PM me.
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Re: Dead Wrong Keystyle

Postby Emadyville » Aug 31st, '10, 01:42

Dope :smoking:

Paris hilton line :laughing:

rhyming decimals and decibels :y:


cool flow on this bitch too :worship:
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Re: Dead Wrong Keystyle

Postby Tash8 » Aug 31st, '10, 03:59

ur vocab is awesome, it's not like complex words but just the right words, to make it all kinda flow well

but at the same i felt ur flow was choppy casue sometimes u'd put the rhymes too early or too late, maybe it's cause how i read it or the way you structured it--but just putting that out there
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Re: Dead Wrong Keystyle

Postby mcZu » Sep 6th, '10, 02:47

Thanks for the feed Tash, appreciate it.
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