Promise Me

[classthe_king]

I wrote this a couple months ago but I'm just getting the guts to post it. It probably won't get much feed but whatever.

Sentus- Promise Me

Dear Jess, to honor you I made this song for you
I made a wrong or two, and that’s the honest truth
I promise you it’s all I do to show you I care
So I sit and reminisce as hands go through my hair
And tears flow down my face and drown my space
I tried to find my pride but I found disgrace
These sounds I make come straight from the heart
But the hatin will spark and then you break it apart
And the achin will start and I am takin it hard
Cause every time I close my eyes I wake in the dark
As I’m creatin this art, hit the mic and goin crazy
There’s no escaping cause you’re who motivates me
I know you hate me but you don’t see the expenses
As you are emotionally beatin me senseless
Just know that without you there might be a Rob
But there definitely wouldn’t be any Sentus

(Chorus) (X2)
Just promise me that you’ll give me honesty
And I promise you that I’ll be honest too
Promise me that you’ll stay by my side
Cause without you I know that I might die

Dear Jessie, this is my last goodbye
You say we’re back together but that’s a lie
This track is my way to release my blame
Ease my shame and hopefully cease my pain
But as I squeeze my anger and hold it in
I’m chokin out, broken down and cold within
I’m goin insane, as im sittin in this present state
Cause it seems like I always get second place
The scars you left me on my heart have kept me
From trusting anyone, being hard protects me
From getting hurt, so I would keep you out
But believe me; more than anything I need you now
But it’s too late; I have to accept the truth’s gone
As I’m left to wonder what did I do wrong
But it’s the past so I’m writing these few songs
So that after I’m done I can finally move on

(Chorus)

There’s just one last thing that I have to say
It happened awhile ago, just back a ways
We were in a fight it was the night of the crash
And I was positive that night was my last
I came home completely broken down
And walked straight downstairs without a spoken sound
I had lost my best friends and now after that
I wanted to die so I needed a disaster bad
I grabbed my dad’s gun, put it to my head
And pulled it, if there was a bullet I’d be dead
So I was diggin around through the rotten mess
Finally found the bullets when I got a text
You asked how I was, and it was so nice that
You showed you cared, it brought the life back
The best thing you ever did was try and make it right
Even though we didn’t make up, you saved my life

[Tash8]

im really impressed, that last verse gave me goosebumps...

would love to hear u record this

maybe i ask what's the idea behind this? did she cheat on u/what?

[Fa-Q]

Damn, Sentus, I dont want any more hesitation on posting shit like this....I loved it

[Strictt Ame]

Damn, Sentus, I dont want any more hesitation on posting shit like this....I loved it

No shit..

Sick drop man, imagery was insane on this, you really painted the visual..keep it up fam

[Solace]

This is different than the recorded one isn't it? The recorded lyrics are better imo, they're more real where as this is packed with multies, but I can't say that's a bad thing since it definitely helped the flow and made it more pleasing to flow out loud, you know? Either way, you know I think that track is amazing even though it was your first over. Swear to god, over 100 plays on it. It really gets to me bro.

[classthe_king]

Thanks guys, that means alot. This is all true and it was really hard for me to write this and almost as hard to post it. And all of it is true yeah, but I'm not goona get into specifics cause its complicated. Also there is audio for it but it was my first song ever, even before Ready For War so my vocals are horrible. And I wanted to rerecord it, I touched up the lyrics a bit but any specific help would be great because I'm trying to make this perfect.

[Solace]

If you re-record it, I'd love you (even more than I already do). Too bad I have to wait 'til November for that.

[classthe_king]

If you re-record it, I'd love you (even more than I already do). Too bad I have to wait 'til November for that.

This forum ain't ready for November

[Xray]

First verse cool, didn't like your rhymes much, cause they were predictable. You needed better vocab on this verse. Second verse, pretty much same problem with first verse. Look you kept on concept, kept on flow, but none of the first two verses were special to me, besides the third one. The third verse is what you were looking for. Great use of words, so yeah, be more consistent with your verses and this song would of owned.

[Weather Man]

Enjoyed it, man.

[classthe_king]

Thanks

[Enimee]

sick, yay ohio

[classthe_king]

Thanks man

[classthe_king]

Thanks, means a lot coming from you.

[ilovebender.com]

I wrote this a couple months ago but I'm just getting the guts to post it. It probably won't get much feed but whatever.

Sentus- Promise Me

Dear Jess, to honor you I made this song for you
I made a wrong or two, and that’s the honest truth
I promise you it’s all I do to show you I care
So I sit and reminisce as hands go through my hair
And tears flow down my face and drown my space
I tried to find my pride but I found disgrace
These sounds I make come straight from the heart
But the hatin will spark and then you break it apart
And the achin will start and I am takin it hard
Cause every time I close my eyes I wake in the dark
As I’m creatin this art, hit the mic and goin crazy
There’s no escaping cause you’re who motivates me
I know you hate me but you don’t see the expenses
As you are emotionally beatin me senseless
Just know that without you there might be a Rob
But there definitely wouldn’t be any Sentus

(Chorus) (X2)
Just promise me that you’ll give me honesty
And I promise you that I’ll be honest too
Promise me that you’ll stay by my side
Cause without you I know that I might die

Dear Jessie, this is my last goodbye
You say we’re back together but that’s a lie
This track is my way to release my blame
Ease my shame and hopefully cease my pain
But as I squeeze my anger and hold it in
I’m chokin out, broken down and cold within
I’m goin insane, as im sittin in this present state
Cause it seems like I always get second place
The scars you left me on my heart have kept me
From trusting anyone, being hard protects me
From getting hurt, so I would keep you out
But believe me; more than anything I need you now
But it’s too late; I have to accept the truth’s gone
As I’m left to wonder what did I do wrong
But it’s the past so I’m writing these few songs
So that after I’m done I can finally move on

(Chorus)

There’s just one last thing that I have to say
It happened awhile ago, just back a ways
We were in a fight it was the night of the crash
And I was positive that night was my last
I came home completely broken down
And walked straight downstairs without a spoken sound
I had lost my best friends and now after that
I wanted to die so I needed a disaster bad
I grabbed my dad’s gun, put it to my head
And pulled it, if there was a bullet I’d be dead
So I was diggin around through the rotten mess
Finally found the bullets when I got a text
You asked how I was, and it was so nice that
You showed you cared, it brought the life back
The best thing you ever did was try and make it right
Even though we didn’t make up, you saved my life

Hmmm... This is great if you love ballads, and it flowed really well, and I guess untill I'm told otherwise that you wrote this from life, as we all do, , but all the same this piece was beautiful, I guess, maybe too beautiful? like, more emotional and less let's get dirty, but that's cool.
This stuff doesn't suck, and I asked to see if it did.