A Place Called Home (Full!)

[Enimee]

i gotta agree with siinide for the most part,
I really enjoyed your flow and the way you peiced to gether thoughts, and let the words display there meaning it was deep.
i love the theme and the tone was real. if you get my meaning
i'd love to hear this in audio to see how you do it and what you would use as an instrumental.

that coast of "fuck it" line is what got me it was pretty creative and it grabbed my attention bigtime

10 thumbs up on this and again i'd love to hear the audio

[J Roc]

Man jesus .... u probably have the best rhymes on the site , or at very least top 3. i lovesss em

And ur topics to write about is dope tooo ...... but rememberrr

is MC MAYBE an MC? MAYBE ... but his Tapes in the dumpster Like BRENDA BABY

lmaoo

Goood Drop jonas

[Jay-Hova]

One of the most poetic songs I've read yet. Rhymes were tight and complex for the most part. I found the flow perfectly as soon as I started reading. I think this is deep and the overall tone of this is very, very dark.

Please record this because it has a lot potential to be something great

[dR3]

Probably one of your best pieces ever (from the ones I've read):

The structure and flow are amazing, story put together brilliantly, I love it.


Did you write this to a beat or?

[dR3]

Probably one of your best pieces ever (from the ones I've read):

The structure and flow are amazing, story put together brilliantly, I love it.


Did you write this to a beat or?

Thanks man, I appreciate the kind words. I don't usually write to beats, this is no exception. But, I try to write stuff that could easily fit to many different instrumentals.

Oh ok. I hope this turns into a song tho, lol.

[dR3]

Me too ^ especially since the feedback has been amazing. I'm on a search for the right beat now, haha.

I can get you unavailable beats from Shadowville if you need any.

[dR3]

Me too ^ especially since the feedback has been amazing. I'm on a search for the right beat now, haha.

I can get you unavailable beats from Shadowville if you need any.

Haha, that would be cool. Any you think would fit this?

Dunno, lol. If I find something I'll let you know. If you haven't found anything until then, that is.

[classthe_king]

There's not really much bad I can say about this lol. If you have an amazing skill for writing, I would love to hear it on a beat so I can hear how it flows for you cause its probably different then how it flows for me. I thought the coast of fuck it part was kind of corny and it seems like you just used it for a rhyme but obviously people liked it so I would keep it. The only other thing is I recognize you were going with words that don't traditionally rhyme and most of them were great but I thought rhyming monster and apartment was kind of a stretch but those were the only two that didn't really rhyme. I loved the vocab though, it's not often I read a piece that teaches me a new word like this did with Titillate and Delorean. Great job

I wouldn't change anything though, this type of rap isn't my expertise.

[Steve Spag]

Damn dude, poetic was an understatement, this was some chicken-soup for the soul! Your vocab. (as always) is just outstanding; the words you choose to use are soo interesting and it's always fresh. I got the flow for it instantly but I can't wait to hear what this sounds like on beat, should be fire. 1st verse was great but my personal fav. was the 2nd; you ended it perfectly.

Well done my friend, keep it up dude!


(I can't wait 'till we execute our plan)