My Apathy

[ilovebender.com]

Ilovebender.com's sh*t looks so perfect, to me, that I'm going to leave that one alone and place some of my prewritten stuff & stuff in here, this again, may be my freestyle/typed on the spot stuff too, and also, I might post some guitar in this thread, I'll turn around and leave you all, My Apathy.
"trust".

Think of ilovebender.com's sh*t as my debut thread in creatve writing and this as thread #2.

APATHY

WE ALL LIVE IN THE WORLD,
LIVIN' IN A HELL
OR YOU MAY LIKE YOUR LIFE?
I JUST DON'T GIVE A FUCK!
WHEN IT'S ALL THE SAME TO ME
BEST BELIEVE IN THIS APATHY
OR NOT... "HEH!"
I JUST DON'T GIVE A FUCK!!!

YEAH I AM MR. WHATEVER
SHIT, ANYTHING GOES!
MY HAIR'S A MESS
NOT TO MENTION THE STATE OF THESE CLOTHES!
N' PEOPLE THINK THEY ALL KNOW ME
WHEN REALLY NOBODY KNOWS
THAT I STILL BE LOOKIN' AT WOMEN,
WISHING THEY WAS HOES!
THAT'S RIGHT!
THAT'S RIGHT!
IT DON'T HURT TO WISH,
WISH FOR MY FAVOURITE DISH
DIFFERENT SMELL,
DIFFERENT FLAVOR!
DIFFERENT GIRL,
DIFFERENT FAVOR!
... HAVE MY BREAKFAST IN BED,
OR MOVE DOWN TO THE KITCHEN
EAT IT DOWN THERE INSTEAD!
"Bo'Cat!"
... MOUNT HER ON THE COUNTER
'CAUSE I'M ABOUT TA'...
"AHHH!"
YOU KNOW HOW WE DO
BABY ME N' YOU
SHIT, I DON'T CARE WHO I SCREW
AS LONG AS SHE LOOKS LIKE YOU,
COOKS LIKE YOU!
BABY JUST HEAT IT UP...
N' WATCH ME EAT IT UP!
YES!

[MakaveliTheDon]

What the hell?

[Solace]

What the hell?

I agree.

[MakaveliTheDon]

What the hell?

I agree.

Seriously, dude what is this

[ilovebender.com]

What the hell?

I'll admit I was 19 when I wrote that one.

I sort of don't care though... (Just like it says on the lid) so if you don't like it, like that I'd make threads like little typed albums, then eat me ... kidding.

I found this thing I wrote years ago, like post #1 and is something I wish to place in this thread of mine.

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MY MIND'S SO BLIND N'
IT WIND'S IN ME
I NEED TO FIND IF MY LOVE IS FREE
EACH TIME I'M BLIND BUT NOW I SEE
THAT KIND WORDS DISTURB N' MAKE ME FREAK!
I JUST DON'T TRUST
SO ADJUST TO ME
I NEED SOME LOVE
SO I'M STUCK ON ME
I GIVE NO FUCK
AS I HAVE NO NEED
TO TURN AROUND
N' LEAVE U MY APATHY!
"trust!"
MY MIND'S THE KIND THAT LETS IN DEEP!
I NEED TO FIND MY PEACE N' WHAT'S FOR ME
I SEE MY SIGN N' STILL I FIND
I NEED MORE TIME FOR WHAT IS MINE,
BUT THIS TIME, THIS TIME I READ
YOU'RE STUFF N' IT'S MUCH TOO DEEP!
I NEED MY MIND SO I REST MY HEAD
I WANT MY PEACE
BUT STILL I'M NOT DEAD!
THAT I CAN'T BARE
WHAT'S IN MY HEAD
N' I WON'T SHARE
SO I'LL CARE INSTEAD
MY COMPASION AS MY HEART ONCE BLED,
STILL SORE
N' YOU KNOW'S WHAT'S WORSE!
I WANT NO MORE
YET I DIED AT BIRTH!
I NEED MY SPLIFF
'CAUSE LIFE'S MY CURSE!
I'LL ROCK THE JOINT
AS I LIKE TO BURST!
. . . WHEN - THEY - SAVED - ME!
WISHED THEY'D ASKED ME FIRST!
MY MIND'S UNKIND BUT IT'S STUCK IN ME
I AM BLIND N' I'D HIDE A MEMORY
STILL NEED TO FIND WHAT DA FUCK'S FOR FREE!
JUST SEEM TO COLIDE SO INSIDE I'LL BE,
OUTSIDE YOU'LL SEE I'M HIGH
SO KNOW NOW THAT I'D JUST PASS ON BY!
BYE!
BYE!
BYE!

[Solace]

Age doesn't matter.

Anyways, I don't really understand your extremely confusing structure. Fixing that would make these pieces easier to read...And I really don't understand why it's all in capitals. You can still get your point across in lowercase lmfao. These are like, rock based songs right?

[MakaveliTheDon]

Yeah, fix your structure a bit.

[ilovebender.com]

If you want to see my current pattern, I ask that you see ilovebender.com's sh*t thread which is basically me free typing a lot of that stuff on the spot with like 2 or 3 posts containing prewritten stuff.

As for the timing flow and structure, I guess for the 2nd one I posted, you gotta be really hurt and vexed and sh*t to understand, as, these, both of these infact, sort of wrote them selfs, so think emotional realeses on my part be it the first one which is just not giving a f**k and just enjoying life and stuff or the 2nd one which, as I said, I was hurt when I wrote it.

Dare I say it, think happy/sad.
Think post #1 happy apathy and my post #2 f**ked up/hurt & vexed.

And also, that both written by younger me, bare that in mind too please.

[Solace]

If you want to see my current pattern, ilovebender.com's sh*t thread is basically me free typing, so a lot of that is current, as for here, I like all of your feedback, but I just have to remind you that, those are pretty much written, and set.

It's cool, I completely understand that.

[MakaveliTheDon]

If you want to see my current pattern, ilovebender.com's sh*t thread is basically me free typing, so a lot of that is current, as for here, I like all of your feedback, but I just have to remind you that, those are pretty much written, and set.

It's cool, I completely understand that.

[ilovebender.com]

I like to look back at these, in their original structure/formats and see these as stepping stones to my current greatness

[classthe_king]

I lovebender.com, you suck.

[ilovebender.com]

I lovebender.com, you suck.

I want to see some of your stuff and see if stuff does suck
yourfeedback's wack so I attack just for fun/best run as I give
no fuck, a new apathy's spun b*tch I switch make you come undone


I don't know, I sort of wrote that on the spot, slate me if you will, but whatever, thanks for the feedback, I just wrote that off it.

[MakaveliTheDon]

I lovebender.com, you suck.

I want to see some of your stuff and see if stuff does suck
yourfeedback's wack so I attack just for fun/best run as I give
no fuck, a new apathy's spun b*tch I switch make you come undone


I don't know, I sort of wrote that on the spot, slate me if you will, but whatever, thanks for the feedback, I just wrote that off it.

Holy shit you're a dumbass

[ilovebender.com]

no I was just bored then, I really don't care though, and I guess thanks for the feedback and sh*t... Idk. lol