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For the childrens

Postby AfterLyfe207 » Oct 10th, '10, 23:10

I'm past 6 shots of bacardy when I start dancin
spittin bars make you kill people like charly manson
hardly standin when I step in caryin fully auto weopens
heres a fuckin lesson to depressed kids,
get a pen disect my methods im feelin restless
no further questions ill tell you what the test is
in a second but first let me handle my agressesion (gun shot)
its perfect, hearin that shit, makes it all worth it
:flutter:

~AfterLyfe

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=99448&p=1368938#p1368938 (link of feedback)
Last edited by AfterLyfe207 on Oct 10th, '10, 23:31, edited 1 time in total.
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You got your weapon check You got your ammo check
You got the filthy slut pinup calender yes You got the food check
You got supplies check you got the trees so we can get high?

GOT TWITTER?
AFTERLYFE ON MYSPACE!?
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Re: For the childrens

Postby classthe_king » Oct 10th, '10, 23:10

You're goona need a link of feedback
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: For the childrens

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 10th, '10, 23:11

classthe_king wrote:You're goona need a link of feedback


your doing that wrong
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Re: For the childrens

Postby classthe_king » Oct 10th, '10, 23:12

DƎRDYPK wrote:
classthe_king wrote:You're goona need a link of feedback


your doing that wrong


How am I suppossed to do it
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: For the childrens

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 10th, '10, 23:12

classthe_king wrote:
DƎRDYPK wrote:
classthe_king wrote:You're goona need a link of feedback


your doing that wrong


How am I suppossed to do it


how are you goona do it?
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Re: For the childrens

Postby AfterLyfe207 » Oct 11th, '10, 03:52

How bout some feedback now?
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You got your weapon check You got your ammo check
You got the filthy slut pinup calender yes You got the food check
You got supplies check you got the trees so we can get high?

GOT TWITTER?
AFTERLYFE ON MYSPACE!?
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