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LilShady4Life - 'The Devil'

Postby LilShady4Life » Oct 11th, '10, 06:45

A lazy ass piece of shit I am,
god dam it's hotter then hell,
have I officially fallen "off this world?",
leaving with questions un-answered,
I think I heard the devil call my name,
he said "if you come with me the fire will spark up your game",
should I go or should I stay ?,
All I'm looking for is a way out,
or have I gone insane,
The way the devil spoke to me left me this pain in my body,
how can somebody do this to me,
All I really wish was to be free,
I am constantly thinking of what to do with my life,
I know how to fly a kite,
I know how to read and write,
this might be the answer I'm looking for,
So, I follow the devil's orders & take one step forward & I said,


Chorus ..X2

Oh the devil has taken control over me,
& I said how could this be, I thought I was free,
But I guess I just fucked myself up G,


Verse 2


This shit is real this pain I feel,
Fuck i'm so hungry I could eat ten happy meals,
Maybe if I make a deal with the devil,
i'll be out this mess because,
This stress has gotten 2 me,
I'm starting 2 feel drowsy, light headed,
This monster has completely fucked me,
tonight i'm feeling un-lucky,
because this olfactory is making me sick,
I think I should stop being a cry-baby over this shit,
finally I've calm myself down,
I turned my frown up-side down & said,


Chorus.. X2


So in my head mind i'm thinking of a plan,
So I hide in the corner of this "hell house",
thinking of what to do in a situation like this,
I find this gun on the ground,
I check and see if there are any bullets,
So there is only 1 bullet left,
I thought about this real hard,
So I before I put that that gun to my head I told you this,

Bridge ...

& I should have known not to cry about stupid shit,
If I didn't maybe i would have never been in this mess,
now theres blood all over my chest,
So i'm put 2 rest all because of this shit,
& now I hear the devil singing...........,

Chorus X2

Oh I have taken control, over you & now you are free,
so next time you come 2 me, don't ask me for a god dam thing,


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It's a work in progress it's not really that great but it's gonna get better. Feedback is welcomed :8)
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Re: LilShady4Life - 'The Devil'

Postby Mr. Chambers » Oct 11th, '10, 16:10

link of feedback?
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Re: LilShady4Life - 'The Devil'

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 11th, '10, 17:59

LilShady4Life wrote:A lazy ass piece of shit I am,
god dam it's hotter then hell,
have I officially fallen "off this world?",
leaving with questions un-answered,
I think I heard the devil call my name,
he said "if you come with me the fire will spark up your game",
should I go or should I stay ?,
All I'm looking for is a way out,
or have I gone insane,
The way the devil spoke to me left me this pain in my body,
how can somebody do this to me,
All I really wish was to be free,
I am constantly thinking of what to do with my life,
I know how to fly a kite,
I know how to read and write,
this might be the answer I'm looking for,
So, I follow the devil's orders & take one step forward & I said,


Chorus ..X2

Oh the devil has taken control over me,
& I said how could this be, I thought I was free,
But I guess I just fucked myself up G,


Verse 2


This shit is real this pain I feel,
Fuck i'm so hungry I could eat ten happy meals,
Maybe if I make a deal with the devil,
i'll be out this mess because,
This stress has gotten 2 me,
I'm starting 2 feel drowsy, light headed,
This monster has completely fucked me,
tonight i'm feeling un-lucky,
because this olfactory is making me sick,
I think I should stop being a cry-baby over this shit,
finally I've calm myself down,
I turned my frown up-side down & said,


Chorus.. X2


So in my head mind i'm thinking of a plan,
So I hide in the corner of this "hell house",
thinking of what to do in a situation like this,
I find this gun on the ground,
I check and see if there are any bullets,
So there is only 1 bullet left,
I thought about this real hard,
So I before I put that that gun to my head I told you this,

Bridge ...

& I should have known not to cry about stupid shit,
If I didn't maybe i would have never been in this mess,
now theres blood all over my chest,
So i'm put 2 rest all because of this shit,
& now I hear the devil singing...........,

Chorus X2

Oh I have taken control, over you & now you are free,
so next time you come 2 me, don't ask me for a god dam thing,


- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -- - -- -- - - -- - - - - - -- - -

It's a work in progress it's not really that great but it's gonna get better. Feedback is welcomed :8)



this is, from what I galnced... a song about someone who'se not in control, then it gets angry because they're not in control, I don't know, this is about letting the devil own you, or something, I guess, I only glanced at this though.
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Re: LilShady4Life - 'The Devil'

Postby LilShady4Life » Oct 11th, '10, 18:33

chambers wrote:link of feedback?


What do you mean ?
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Re: LilShady4Life - 'The Devil'

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 11th, '10, 19:13

he means read my stuff, tell me what you think, and then link it in here... My stuff, anybodies stuff who isn't you. Make it mine though...
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Re: LilShady4Life - 'The Devil'

Postby classthe_king » Oct 11th, '10, 22:56

Robot how stupid are you, seriously?
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: LilShady4Life - 'The Devil'

Postby SajN » Oct 11th, '10, 22:59

He is so stupid, that I could've banned him before he made a second post, but I went to work instead.
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