First of all, this is a great first hip hop beat
As the others said, the kick needs to be harder/louder. I used to make beats with by Dr.Dre headphones on but then was told by Ashez(Best producer on this forum imo) that to make it using speakers. So i suggest you do that. Another thing is that maybe you could make the bass louder (if its in here) to make it sound more full and add like a brass or synth hit during the verse to add some more variation. Anyway great start
Mind checking out my "She Will" remake and telling me what you think?
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