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X'ed Up- Life

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 24th, '10, 15:13

1st Verse.....

Crusing around my good-old hometown, weed city,
Hearing a girl on the radio, feeling like P. Diddy,
Stop at the local place and go inside a daycare,
Inside a classroom many children just lay there,
Pick my little pretty 3 year old innocent sister,
With hands each one with a transparent blister,
Next I take out my crumbled, one dollar bill,
Buy four cookies and place a colored collar still,
On my sister's neck, now I feel like a superhero,
Doesn't really matter if my money stoops at zero,
Rob an extra three dollars and eat at Wingstop,
While hearing the music from Britney sing pop,
After a pleasant meal, I have a reminiscent feel,
Went back in time and really it was less than real,
We broke in and robbed some chicken wings,
Good memories though we were kicken things,

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Re: X'ed Up- Life

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 25th, '10, 23:53

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Re: X'ed Up- Life

Postby Spyder » Mar 26th, '10, 00:25

first bar reminded me of Kesha :unsure:
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Re: X'ed Up- Life

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 26th, '10, 00:26

Spyder wrote:first bar reminded me of Kesha :unsure:

It's a reference to her horrible song "Tik Tok" that you hear on the readio 5 times every hour.LITERALLY. :shakehead:
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Re: X'ed Up- Life

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 26th, '10, 00:55

Hey I liked this...but seemed like you wanted to show emotion and you held back...idk....good multis and structure though
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