Help with a rap for class?

[yoitstopdawg89]

Hi, I'm a college student and we have to shoot a music video for class. I was wondering if some of yall could help me with my lyrics, which admittedly are pretty bad right now. I'm trying to make it like Eminem's 3AM, just a horror killing story haha

I could use your help making more lyrics, im looking for 3-4 verses, and fixing the ones i already have. The professor isn't really going to care what the lyrics are, more of that I'm using proper camera shots and stuff since it is a communications class, but I still want it to be good. So i appreciate the help. This is what I have so far.

Chorus (singing) : When you close your eyes and go to sleep/ I'll be right there in your dreams/ I'll be choking you while you bleed/ slitting your wrists cuz i don't care/ this is yourrrr nightmare

First Verse (rappin) Nightmare, yeah that's putting it lightly/ Think I'm wrong, I wouldn't try me/ Cuz once you try me you'll be put on an IV/ Haha, I kid, not an IV could revive thee/ Haha, am I being confusing?/Ask Freddy Kruger, he thinks I'm too gruesome/ I cut his limbs off and proceeded to use them/ I put each arm on to another/ I used Kruger's claws to tickle your mother/ I cut her up into pieces to eat them/ Then I decided, nah, how bout I feed them/ to you, in some beef stew when you get home from school, CUZ

CHORUS


and now im stuck. so i would appreciate any editing and adding you guys could do to this haha. Feel free to use celebrities to name drop. I'm about killing what's fake i guess in a future verse perhaps. the fake in the world being people that hate me for being me yet they have boob jobs and hair extensions or such. Anyway i could just really use some help. THANKS

[yoitstopdawg89]

we have to actually write and sing or rap a song on our own. so i feel like i might as well make it good. i am not asking you to write it all for me and copy it. i just would like people to add on to what i have and make changes for me, because if I have to do something, I might as well make it as good as possible.

[yoitstopdawg89]

i had the bars in line form but when i went to do it here it made it look weird so i seperated it with /'s. I don't have a beat yet, i think im gonna try to find a beat or make a beat or have someone give me a beat after i write the lyrics. once again, tho, any help would be appreciated

[Tash8]

god damn this horror ass shit...come up with something more original or more meaningful..especially if it's for a class.

[Tash8]

god damn this horror ass shit...come up with something more original or more meaningful..especially if it's for a class.

horror is actually a lot more original genre but people who do it like Em kind of ruin it

I feel your pain Tash *yawns

it was kinda original when Relapse came out...but since then how many stupid ass horror tracks have come out (especially from tr artists? a lot)

but yea man, it's cool though.

[yoitstopdawg89]

seriously can someone find some lines for me to use please?

[Tash8]

seriously can someone find some lines for me to use please?

naw fuck you, it's ur project

[yoitstopdawg89]

whats your problem

[Tash8]

whats your problem

My issue witchu?

You have posted 5 posts and you expect us to help you do your assignment. You come up with a very unoriginal boring idea. You expect to find a beat that will fit your lyrics exactly after you written your lyrics (yeah right, only dudes who been rapping a while can pull that off). You got a stupid ass name, "yoitstopdawg89". You don't even bother to check other people's shit first, you just come here and post your shit and expect us to help? (well at least I'm helping you when I tell you that the horror subject is wack as fuck, especially when you probably won't be able to pull off the delivery for it and you'll sound like an idiot)

and yes I know I am very judgmental, but it is with good reason.