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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 29th, '10, 06:43

Great story telling Co, I haven't seen a lot of that from you. The rhymes and multis seemed a little off idk, maybe its just me...but I liked reading this...good piece Co.
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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby gutawafang » Mar 29th, '10, 08:04

Yeah, storytelling is fucking good man. :y: :y: :y:

And the title, I like it. :y: :y: :y:

As usual, multis. :worship:
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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby Arabian Shady » Mar 29th, '10, 09:07

That was surreal, the beat was dope too man,
wicked story tellin right there, for real, I digg the way you've written the structure, cause i personally find it difficult copyin what i wrote on paper to the PC and STILL gettin a dope structure
That was dope :b:
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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby classthe_king » Mar 29th, '10, 14:47

Wow, maybe the best story telling piece I've ever read on here. I was actually on my seat, waiting to see what happens next. I related to like the first half so much too lol. And the ending was great. If you made the whole thing longer and talked more about how happy they were in the begining then if you record it you might be able to move some people with that ending. And fuck rhymes in a piece like this, yours were fine.
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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby classthe_king » Mar 29th, '10, 21:35

Where the hell is Relaspe :angry:
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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby classthe_king » Mar 29th, '10, 21:37

:shifty:
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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby Spyder » Mar 29th, '10, 21:50

:laughing: @ your comment


dope peice tho
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Re: Coleon - Crossroads (Please Feed)

Postby Solace » Mar 29th, '10, 21:59

That was amazing Coleon. I don't know how to explain how much I liked this...I love it. The story itself was dope as fuck. In rhyme form it was so good. I hadn't at all expected the ending...Keep it up.
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