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Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby classthe_king » Mar 29th, '10, 03:29

(Chorus)
I'm sorry, please just hear me out,
And maybe you'll get what I'm tearing 'bout,
I'm sorry, but my heart is breaking now,
You built me up just to break me down.

(Sentus)
When I see your pretty face it tears me up inside
Cause your beautiful smiles makes me want to die
I'm sorry I'm not cool enough to make your radar
Or even hot enough to receive a date like they are
But I guarantee you that I'm not as fake as they are
I guess you will never learn, why wait the days are
Coming to an end and I will always be at your side
But I'm about to give up as you watch me pass ya by
I am not satisfied, but my heart you diminish fast
But I guess there right the nice guy will finish last
I'm sorry I am not six foot and can bench two-fifty
But I'd bench the moon if it meant havin you wit me
Do you get me, my heart has no choice but to sink
You wanna guy like me, I don't know what to think
I know sometimes I get mad and may seem shifty
I'm just sorry your embarrassed to be seen with me

(Chorus)

(Solace)
Just knowing it’s my loss, not yours, you got control,
It’s just that I’m imprisoned but I’ve not got parole,
I just lose it, everything I’ve done I do in respect,
I’m sorry that being with me would just ruin your rep,
I’m waiting for that opportunity that’s never coming,
Think it over, maybe we could be friends or something,
Knowing that everything I’ve done for you didn’t matter,
I’m sorry, please understand I’m ripped and shattered,
Even though you’d rather be those that are acting fly,
Pretend I’m not bothered in school when you pass me by,
And sometimes I feel like I’m being stabbed with knives,
I’m sorry, it’s just being with you is where the passion lies,
The thought of you is enemy and yet it gives me energy,
It levers me, though I feel like I’m being tested see,
‘Cause I can never breathe, I need some stress relief,
I’m sorry, that you were never able to see the best of me.

(Chorus)

(Sentus)
I cannot wake up without having you on my mind
And that's why you always find a way on my lines
When you're gone I find that I will begin to scream
Even if I close my eyes cause you're in my dreams
I'm sorry I'm not the Prince Charming you imagined
But if you want that asshole then you can have him
But he'll fuck you over and then harshly ignore you
You know what, actually I just feel sorry for you
Last edited by classthe_king on Mar 29th, '10, 17:44, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby classthe_king » Mar 29th, '10, 17:44

Thanks Cole, you always come through with feed :worship:

And I added an extra 8 cause the beat had more room
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby Solace » Mar 29th, '10, 21:52

Coleon wrote:Sorry By Bekay type chorus, I like it

good verse Sol, you guys had great chemistry, good rhymes, though you seem to be gettin a bit generic, this however was great

The thought of you is enemy and yet it gives me energy,
It levers me, though I feel like I’m being tested see,
‘Cause I can never breathe, I need some stress relief,
I’m sorry, that you were never able to see the best of me.


I feel you bro ^^

Thanks. Glad you like the chorus. I understand about getting generic though, but on this subject I can't think of any other way to make it unique from others; ya know? Anyways, mad props for commenting.
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby Spyder » Mar 29th, '10, 21:55

honestly i was feelin the track

class your first verse was a big let down from what u can do, yes this piece isnt about multies and what not but i never felt any emotion. my expression never changed from when i clicked into the thread to when i finished the verse

solace yours was alright you been on alot of sad stuff lately id like to see different from you, maybe your out of sad shit to rap about idk. multies were good and fit perfect with it, i kinda felt it but not that much

in my mind you two could came alot better...pause
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby Solace » Mar 29th, '10, 22:00

Spyder wrote:solace yours was alright you been on alot of sad stuff lately id like to see different from you, maybe your out of sad shit to rap about idk. multies were good and fit perfect with it, i kinda felt it but not that much

in my mind you two could came alot better...pause

Lol I really couldn't have changed the subject matter of not being good enough for a girl, as Class described to me, so don't blame the subject on me :S But what do you mean by, "out of sad shit to rap about" Also, thanks for the feed.
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby Spyder » Mar 29th, '10, 22:04

i wasnt blamin anyone for the concept, i just think you both could have done better with it

and by out of sad shit, i know i get tired out rhyming about the same old same old and my shit gets repatative. i just didnt know if maybe you were kinda blocked on emotional tracks :sweating:
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby Solace » Mar 29th, '10, 22:07

Same old shit...What are you talking about. Please don't tell me you think my previous topics about the constant pressure of life or my father or the one that no one fed cept Coleon of me just practicing multies have to do with not being good enough for a girl? Aha, re-reading that sounds like I'm being an asshole or something I'm not trying to be lol i swear.
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby Spyder » Mar 29th, '10, 22:18

calm down buddy :smoking: have a smoke

and im not relating topics at all, so dont think that

this is a "downer" track about a woman in which you cant get... correct?

your previous tracks THOUGH DIFFERENT TOPICS are emotion and 'downer tracks'

thats the relations im making
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Re: Sentus & Solace- I'm Sorry

Postby classthe_king » Mar 30th, '10, 17:34

Thanks for the feed Spyder
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