keystyle to pimp like me (D12)

[tjb]

something i just wrote up quick, feed if you want.

so ima rap murderer, cold blooded killer
the truth in 3 words: no ones iller
headphones was empty i am the filler
tempted, but my bass it crumbles buildings
bump that shits an its bumpin children... away
so i remain the villain, yesterday, today and tomorow at that
i stay the same man behind the mask
same plan, bask in these word aftermaths
whether there slurred or clear im in a platnum bath
smacking ladies asses always after that
but if they asking for my cash ill put a cap in that
cuz im bold im brash, i dont give a fuck
take hold, or lash or stick em up
police chase crash in this pick up truck
click click on ma wrists now i know im fucked
but whether its the pen or mansion ima live it up

[X'ed Up]

It was weak. It had no multis and the flow went off at times. Maybe you should try to have better structure in your rap so it flows smoothly.

Keep writing

[tjb]

i agree flow was weak. but there was multis. like i just checked an i almost wanna record because the only reason i kept is becuz i liked how it flowed

[X'ed Up]

i agree flow was weak. but there was multis. like i just checked an i almost wanna record because the only reason i kept is becuz i liked how it flowed

my bad there were mutlis but still it lacked some.