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Old Love Song I Found

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Old Love Song I Found

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 30th, '10, 03:14

I don't know how it happened, but I fell in love with a girl,
She's more than an angel, see she lives above the world,
When I see her everyday, its like I have to fight my desire,
You're my kindling to my spirit, now come and light my fire,
I'll stair into your beautiful eyes, waiting for my sight to tire,
I promise, you never have to use your feet, I'll be your shoe laces,
I'll carry you, I'll kiss your soft lips, leaveing new traces,
Our lips are the bridge, that can connect two faces,
Your my goddess, I sit on the ground, just to please your feet,
Kiss them, then work up slowly to your legs and knees meet,
I wish I could explain, in a beautiful language, how I feel,
I came to you, a wounded bird, and somehow now I heal,
And because of you, everyday I find a new way to smile,
I wandered blindly, but you made me stay a while,
The world stope, in a moment and each of us becomes one,
The heat of our hearts, beating slow, numbs the sun,

What will it take for you and I, to fall in love,
Give you the sun, moon, stars, or all the above,
See, we can lie in a flower bed, lie under the stars,
Look up, see Saturn, Jupiter, than wonder if Mars,
Loves Venus, and is his love as deep as our love,
Dies he look to tell his secret, to the nearest star above,
I'll be here at twilight, and when the sun rises at dawn,
You ask me, who will be your shoulder to cry on,
I promise I'll be here even when the sky's gone,
And even if the sun goes out, and the earth darks,
I want to see your shining eyes, and your birth marks,
I want to tend to, each and every one of your, dire cries,
I can fly you, once more above the flashing fire flies,
If I divert my attention, to the sun, that'll be the wrong glair,
I have the burden of your blue eyes, and that's a strong stair,
Would you be mad, if I said, I want to see your long hair,
What if I said I want to fly you to Eden, and write a song there,
I'm against you, holding you, and my mind starts to think,
That you mean more than anything, cause our hearts are synced,

I see your heart beat, I see you breate in your chest,
I see my name on your heart, and on your left breast,
I give you me all, I know you'll never accept less,
I wish I could write you a love not, in perfect hand writing,
Memorize all my songs for you, before you, I stand reciting,
I want the entire would to know, I fell for Miss Blue Eyes,
And since your blue eyes, knew skies, the sun knew to rise,
When your in the clouds, I have nothing to put my hand upon,
You knocked me off my feet, so I have nothing to stand on,
Your me heaven, when I'm going through hell,
I display my affection, I just hope I'm showing you well,
It seems when ever your near, each of my lips knows,
I hope I can warm uou from your forehead, to your tip toes,
Even if I give you my jacket, my shirt, or have to strip clothes,
I'll hold you forever, I pray to God, my grip grows,
I've been fallin for you, I just hope my trip slows,
We're so connected, in every way, that even my beating heart,
Knows that, miles and miles, we'll never be fleeting apart,
And when I get back, and kiss you, I'll be greeting art,
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Re: Old Love Song I Found

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 30th, '10, 19:15

Bump
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Re: Old Love Song I Found

Postby classthe_king » Mar 30th, '10, 19:37

I can tell this is old. You're rhyming is so much better now. This piece was ok.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Old Love Song I Found

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 31st, '10, 05:06

Thanks class, yea this is 5-6 months old and thanks for seeing my improvement...

And Co, yea we definately gotta collab :smoking:
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