Word Party (school ballad homework)

[Just Silver]

I was supposed to make a ballad for school first one i ever wrote willingly
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Create writings from scratch
words become ingredients
make another batch
verbs upon a decent dish

If taste is what it lacks
sprinkle on a metaphor
if it needn't that
invite words get some more

withdraw from the word bank
pick up some supplies
welcome i must thank
for the picture without eyes

our house in the middle of the paragraph
the party upon writers block
the directions on a piece of scrap
hope this period never stops

it all went well
no word of a death sentence
and if you can spell
my letter had left remembrance

[Fa-Q]

Idk Silv, I'm not really feeling this...what's a ballad anyway?

[GoodGirlsGetGutted]

A ballad is a narrative verse.

This is extremely weak.
The iambc form is just flat out wrong, most of it.
It needs work.
Oh, and lose the multis.

[Just Silver]

well I think im still using it because im on a deadline and have tons of projects to do

[Just Silver]

Idk Silv, I'm not really feeling this...what's a ballad anyway?

me either lol i should have went all poetic on that bitch but ended up having a rap style to it that seemed to work at the time but now that i look back it has few syllables