Coleon - Intertwined Fate (One Last Story...Best Yet?)

[GoodGirlsGetGutted]

Hmm.
This reminds me of Lose Yourself, even down to the flow.

And a great flow it is indeed.
Excellent vocabulary and word choice (except "fam").
Top notch lyricism.

I can't say I can relate to the concept, but that's my problem, not yours.

[GoodGirlsGetGutted]

The first time you used it it was okay, but the second time?

supportin his fam like he supposed to be

(c'mon man...)

supporting his famiLY like he supposed to BE

No excuses for missing that rhyme.

[Fa-Q]

Holy shit at the flow...I think this is the best...love the rhyme scheme... Crazy good drop

[BabyBLue91]

Love songs with a little twist at the end.. good story telling skills! It read pretty smooth to me. Keep em coming cole

[Arabian Shady]

DUDE that second verse was killaaahhh!
the flow was really good man, for reeal, went really good with the beat.
the story tellin was stop on man, it was like 3 mini movies
Good shit

[classthe_king]

This was.....great. Was I the only one that knew it was the same kid before the ending

Was this all true?

[MikeNUFC]

I'm a massive fan of storytelling stuff and this wasn't an exception.

The structure of the rhymes were perfect and I picked up the flow straight away when I read it, without hearing the beat.

Great work.

[dR3]

This was purely brilliant Cole, keep it up.
Can we expect audio for this one?

[MikeNUFC]

This was purely brilliant Cole, keep it up.
Can we expect audio for this one?

Yeah I'd love to hear audio of this. Especially with that brilliant beat

[dR3]

Was this all true?

nope

and about the audio, I write all my stuff for audio these days so yes, I will be recording my good stuff once I'm good enough, for now it's 16's and maybe a throw away track

Good enough for what? Writing or audio?

[classthe_king]

Was this all true?

nope

and about the audio, I write all my stuff for audio these days so yes, I will be recording my good stuff once I'm good enough, for now it's 16's and maybe a throw away track

Haha oh, well then I still like you're first story the best, about the boy and the girl that died. If this was all true I would have liked it the best.

[Tash8]

I truly enjoyed reading this Cole..props on that. I love this writing style, it's very descriptive--almost too much though.

"stealin quick, not cause he wanted it but needed it
his stomach rumbled, his hunger it was eatin him"

my fav two lines..nice job bro

[classthe_king]

how could it be true? a guy can't live two lives just to kill one of them

IDK All of it could have been true but that

[Tash8]

I truly enjoyed reading this Cole..props on that. I love this writing style, it's very descriptive--almost too much though.

"stealin quick, not cause he wanted it but needed it
his stomach rumbled, his hunger it was eatin him"

my fav two lines..nice job bro

thanks bro, and I love being descriptive, using my story writing skills in rap is a dream come true, I finally got around to writing these stories I've had thought up for a while

thanks Tash love it when guys like you drop by to feed

sick man, i used write drops like these all the time--kinda stopped recently though...hit me up for an audio collab man.

[Tash8]

you can't record during spring break but you definitely can still improve yourself.

If I were going on a cruise with my family right now, besides trying to pick up girls, I would go to the bow of the ship and start freestyling. Or better yet write some shit and then go spit it at 3 different speeds (slows, normal and fast). Believe it or not, but that helps a lot. Rapping it slow, helps me learn to pronounce everything. Rapping it fast helps me flow better. and then when I feel comfortable I rap it normal speed to a beat.

but yeah that's just meeee.

p.s. talk about wake and bake btw...(i woke up at 6:30 and decided why not?)