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Shredded Socialcontract

Postby mcZu » Mar 31st, '10, 23:32

How much more thoughts can I consume?
Food for thought, there’re more to come soon
So, I contemplate to con the contempt, due
To this template, hun, that is connected to you
What more can I do? I contacted you
You said ‘’why should I treat a con with tact, Zu?’’
Calling me liar, while I should attack you
‘cause you were the one who lied, so ask who-
..ever you want to, just vacate..
You and I, behold, disappearing contacts
‘cause, they say..
Beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder, I was wearing contacts
Though days sway..
And disappear in contracts, so I’m not on that
Appearing conflict that is inflicting pain on set
I refrain from dropping names, no bomb threat
Perception is bound to hit misconception
Along the lines of the climax of misdirection
Missing aspects in your climate that is affecting
Your sleeping pattern, dreaming bad, at turns
I wish I wouldn’t wish you bad things, nor curse
But at times, I wish I had the opportunity to curse
Part of the unity that exists first in my head
I stress this by treating my flaws with drugs like a nurse
Wait, I mean with puzzles to escape the hearse
Yet, I’m puzzled, craving to understand my own verse
I only cry from the inside, I cannot quench my thirst

Is this reality? I have to pinch myself first
Before I can get off that bench myself first
So I have to comprehend myself first..
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
- Lupe Fiasco

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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby classthe_king » Apr 1st, '10, 17:22

This was crazy Zu lol, loved it :worship:

Glad to see you're posting again
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby mcZu » Apr 2nd, '10, 17:01

Thanks Class, 'preciate it.
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby Spyder » Apr 3rd, '10, 06:18

piece was alright for me, ive seen better from you
didnt realy get to deep on the topic for me. and alot of your bars seem like they repeat idk
seems like when i read a line i go back cause i thought it was there earlier... if im making sense

anyway not bad Zu
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby Fa-Q » Apr 3rd, '10, 06:40

good piece Zu, good meaning....I would like to see more multies from you though
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 3rd, '10, 10:58

i thought the begining of the verse had insane multies like for real, i thought it was really well written
the parts where you stop and start the flow reminds me of lupe, he does that alot.
Um i dunno i just didnt understand the concept behind it, like why'd you write this. :sweating:
the verse is dope tho :y:
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So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby mcZu » Apr 3rd, '10, 12:57

Thank you all for the feed, I appreciate it.

This verse is about me trying to shred my social contract with my ex.

About using more multies, yeah. I could, but I find it more important to express yourself to the fullest instead of giving that up in order to have more multies. Because sometimes you cannot use a multie to describe what's on your mind, not vivid enough at least. Well, at least for now I cannot, guess that's something I have to improve.

About having repetitive lines. It may seem like that because the plot revolves around my thoughts, starts off with doubting how much more I can take, then fading into trying to explain what happened and then back again trying to box away those thoughts in order to escape depression.
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby dR3 » Apr 3rd, '10, 19:49

Wow, man. I'm impressed. For someone who doesn't speak English as his main language, this is awesomeness.
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby X'ed Up » Apr 3rd, '10, 21:20

Good piece. I like the content too :toocool:

Great piece :smoking:
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Re: Shredded Socialcontract

Postby mcZu » Apr 3rd, '10, 22:17

dR.dR3 wrote:Wow, man. I'm impressed. For someone who doesn't speak English as his main language, this is awesomeness.

Thanks dR3, I appreciate it.


X'ed Up wrote:Good piece. I like the content too :toocool:

Great piece :smoking:

Thanks X, appreciate it.
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