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Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 3rd, '10, 10:39

Aiyo, so heres the thing right.The topic is BASICALLY being opressed or pushed to a limit, so much that its either do or die,You're comin back swingin, not takin shit anymore-however you want to call it.

As usual my verse deals with Muslims and surrounding issues, it shows what we WERE, what we've been reduced to, a little inspiration for the oppressed and then the ENOUGH IS ENOUGH bit.
As far as my brothas are concerned, i dont think they need explanation.


Gents i give you Mc Anonymous and Yah-Hah Scott


Lets Go :8)



Mc Anonymous:
walk into a person, think I'm stalking cause they cursing
they blurting, unnerving, worse when they barking because it's hurting
I'm furious, and I'm certain, I'm losing what is my purpose
write cursive, to show the yearning, my heart gives from all its spurting
knowing I'm losing, showing abusive notions and movements
hoping improvement from oppression; it's sewing it's students
and OH I was stupid.... and now the Anger is fuming
I'm breaking mirrors, breaking spirits, wire hanger abusive
At breaking points, I don't give a fuck anymore
everywhere I'm scorned, I don't live with much on my door
suicidal, homicidal, viral, sick in the head
written instead, on my wild vitals ''witness is dead''
the undulation ceases, the waves decreases, I'm leaving
my spirit leaking from the cuts that the hanger was beating
I'm sick of tired of wicked liars, I'm tired of crying
I'm tired of oppression, tired of the life I'm despising



Arabian Shady:

My backdrop's the land of the ancient legends, i stand reppin
A muslim man growin up on the sands, withstand testin
Reminiscin of a past that passed, with no present,
see its sad when we think of facts thatve proceeded 9/11
Oppression,brutality, civilian casualities,stereotypical
attacks on muslims like they were allergies, yea
see none of it ADD's up , its irrational mathematicaly
compare a graph of death rates, & our's shows linearity
we've been painted a picture,each stroke touches and misses
islams perception's being sold, like it is a new business
We've fathered your reasearch,the basis of your missions:
general sciences, medicine, mathematics and physics,
We are not what press writes,thats fictional like a dream
A shot of "Act-right" could freshen, things up like the greens
OR I could stay true to the stererotype,press the trigga and
scream, Bism-i-ALLAH - Al - Rah - man - Al - Ra - heem




Yah-Hah:

Native and crazed, in a white mans land disguise erasin my face,
So blatant we say, we're happy see we're laughing as we play in the maze.
And I'm hatin your race, shit I'm fuckin blaming your race,
My people of the poorest type, the ones you ignorin right,
On this reservation we stay, bribed with shining bright offerings,
Shiny lights and slot machines Native pride disguised,
with no pride through my tiny tight property,
He said make it personal but already know all my life story,
Its quite gory, jumpin off 5 stories but God just wont fight for me,
Read it its quite boring," just one more sob story,
And i bet his moms sorry, watch how this slobs boring,
Top of my lungs native pride till the day I die before rhyming begins,
Colonization right guys, nothin but white lies justifying your sins,
Cowboys without toys but still they're limitless in tyrants,
Still killed by savages, these bad bitches so primative and violent,
And so given this is my gift I'm givin it to my kids,
So their innocence and life is no longer stricken with the blindness,
Even my kids are strippin up these white kids,
rippin up their sides and my tears drippin when I'm fightin,
My polite smile is quite wild, killin em, killin em with kindness,
Opressed to the point I cant walk,
stressed with a joint I can't stop they say I'm blessed,
but I confess I'm annoyed by all this tan talk,
Sleepin with no holes just bones straight stretched in this damn box,
So with my tomahawk I'm choppin off ya face and race till my hand stops,



Appreciate the effort peeps, please leave feed :b:
PEACE!
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Apr 3rd, '10, 12:56

Anon's verse was good technique wise, but it didn't feel like it belonged in this piece to me. I was impressed with his lyricism, but he didn't have the emotion to back it up.

Your verse was better because it combined lyricism, meaning, and most importantly, perspective. You commanded your words with power and authority, all while staying relevant. Your verse stole the show.
Out of curiosity , could you translate "Bism-i-ALLAH - Al - Rah - man - Al - Ra - heem" for me, please?

Yah, as always, conveys such a cynically morbid style that I enjoy. This is no exception. I loved how his verse was right after yours, because of the fire and ice contrast between your wistful pleading and his irrevocable anger.

This was excellent overall, but I still don't get what Anonymous was doing here.
If his verse was a stand-alone, I'd love it, but I could've done without him on this one.
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 3rd, '10, 15:39

@Coleon: yea i get you homie, the topic thing is definately what im gna tackle on my next drop, something totally different than what i usually do.i TRULY appreciate your feedback. :b:

@GGGG: We'll the literall tranlation of : "Bism-i-ALLAH - Al - Rah - man - Al - Ra - heem" is "In the name of Allah, the most Gracious , The Most Merciful". It is something muslims usually recite before they start anything: Prayers,eat food etcetera.SO in context it means that i'll just press the trigga while i scream that, and make it sound like how each and every one of us is potrayed. I appreciate the feedback and the kind words, thank you for taking the time and checking it out :b:

Lets go Peeps, where are all ma brothas at? :y:
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby classthe_king » Apr 3rd, '10, 16:39

I've already fed anons.

I liked yours because that's something I haven't seen much and like someone said it put a different perspective on things but tbh it got kind of boring. You're rhyming was pretty weak imo, even though this topic didn't need that I still thought they could of been better.

Yah-hah's was good too but sometimes I felt like you tried to shove too many rhymes in there. Your stuff was hard to read cause the flow wasn't very good, too many unnecessary syllables. You're story telling was good though and you got the point across nicely.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Fa-Q » Apr 3rd, '10, 17:02

I'm not gonna say what Annons verse was...he got his stupid ass banned...

Anyway Ara Sha, good emotional verse...the only thing I would like more from you is more multis and more vocabulary. And you might not be a multi kind of guy that's fine. I actually liked that you had the bit of Arabic (I'm assuming that's what it was) in at the end. Good verse

Yahhah, you know how I feel about this Jus, loved it. I do think your slippin a bit but I know you got other shit going on in your life. Good verse.

Overall, liked it...I think Zu could have fucked the shit outta this collab if he was on it :whistle:
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 3rd, '10, 17:37

@Class: the idea behind my verse was to show people that constantly stereotyping an ENTIRE population based on a small fraction of the whole doesnt go well, umm and that erry body else has had enough.I can understand what your sayin, and i will improve,definately.Thank you for the feed brotha :b:

@Fa-Q: haha, i can digg the vocabulary thing, i just gotta start reading more books, im workin on that.Multies *sighs im not a big fan of multies, altho i tried an incorporate as many as i felt would contribute to overall enjoyment without hindering the conveying of the message.Indeed the ending bit was arabic.For the literal translation you can see my other post.Thanks for the feed bro, i REALLY appreciate it :b:
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So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Apr 3rd, '10, 17:40

To be honest, I wasn't even aware of this stereotype before this. I think people the people who stereotype your population are in a drastic minority.
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Fa-Q » Apr 3rd, '10, 17:45

GoodGirlsGetGutted wrote:To be honest, I wasn't even aware of this stereotype before this. I think people the who stereotype your population are in a drastic minority.

There's a lot in Wichita...because there's more Muslims. We have the largest Mosque in the western hemispere (so I heard)...and people will slip pork in their grocery carts and stuff...stupid shit really
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 3rd, '10, 18:13

Well ive personally experienced it in high school. I studied in a british high school and after 9/11 I used to get called "the shadow",paki.. or in extreme cases "muslim fuck" , whenever british or american troops would get killed in afghanistan or iraq i'd face hell at school. i write about this stuff cause its something i face/faced regularly.
high school sucked balls :zipped:
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So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Apr 3rd, '10, 18:24

It's interesting how prejudices are so different from place to place.
I live in a 99% white community, so you can imagine that we have a far different situation here. I've never faced racial discrimination myself, so I can't say I can relate.
Thanks for opening my eyes.
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby mcZu » Apr 3rd, '10, 19:31

You have to understand Anon's past to fully comprehend his verse. But, still, it's under his standards. Not a bad verse, however, he can do way better.

Arabian Shady, I think it was good, you shined on this. However, you might wanna switch up the way you utilize the content. I'm not saying you should tackle a different subject, but just try to play with the different aspects of such a scenario more. And I agree on the lack of vocab. Multies, well, I don't care that much about them, but they can make it easier for you to construct a flow.

Yah, I love how you said fuck it and had more lines than the rest. Technically it was ace, however, you have to switch up your subject matter. Or, like Arabian Shady, try to tackle it from a different angle.

And to Fa-Q, lol, word. This kind of subject matter is what I love to write about.
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 3rd, '10, 19:39

mcZu wrote:You have to understand Anon's past to fully comprehend his verse. But, still, it's under his standards. Not a bad verse, however, he can do way better.

Arabian Shady, I think it was good, you shined on this. However, you might wanna switch up the way you utilize the content. I'm not saying you should tackle a different subject, but just try to play with the different aspects of such a scenario more. And I agree on the lack of vocab. Multies, well, I don't care that much about them, but they can make it easier for you to construct a flow.

Yah, I love how you said fuck it and had more lines than the rest. Technically it was ace, however, you have to switch up your subject matter. Or, like Arabian Shady, try to tackle it from a different angle.

And to Fa-Q, lol, word. This kind of subject matter is what I love to write about.



Vocab is something im definately gonna work on man, I try and write about stuff people dont usually write about, BUT i will try and switch it up alot more.
Thanks for the Feedback homie, means alot comin from you :b:

@GGGG: i guess the sayin "seeing is believing" does have some truth in it :flower: . Im glad i could enlighten you.
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Spyder » Apr 4th, '10, 04:50

Anon: wasnt feeling your verse homie, everything structurly was there but i just didnt get that deep factor that i sohuld have in a piece like this. it seemed boring and could have been done alot better imo

AS: i liked this verse man, for me it started out better than it ended. but deff good to see something from you, everything was there. maybe not the best thing ive seen but good none the less.

YH: kind of lacked on this drop bro, again everything strucurley there but i wasnt feeling the fire and deepness i should have.

not a bad collab arabian brought it up imo :y:
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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 4th, '10, 12:33

Spyder wrote:Anon: wasnt feeling your verse homie, everything structurly was there but i just didnt get that deep factor that i sohuld have in a piece like this. it seemed boring and could have been done alot better imo

AS: i liked this verse man, for me it started out better than it ended. but deff good to see something from you, everything was there. maybe not the best thing ive seen but good none the less.

YH: kind of lacked on this drop bro, again everything strucurley there but i wasnt feeling the fire and deepness i should have.

not a bad collab arabian brought it up imo :y:


Hell fukin yea, thanks for the feed homie, im glad you saw an improvement-how ever small it may be.
My next verse will be different and i will indeed that feedback into consideration and improve.
Thank you for taking the time to look into this :b:

Aiyo where are all my brothas at?!!
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: Vantage Point Ft "Guests"

Postby Yah-hah » Apr 8th, '10, 17:19

Thanks to the homies who left feed. I kinda had to write this inbetween alot of shit so my flow may seem a bit choppy. Props to Anon and Shady for gettin this all together. Yeah Arabian never said how many lines he was like "bro just give me some hot shit lol" My internet went out and I actually had to text Fa-Q my whole verse over 11 texts lol. Thanks to the homies
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