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Song Cry

Postby mcZu » Apr 4th, '10, 22:24

Throwaway verse. Wrote it 2 months ago to the Jay-Z - Song Cry beat. I don't think I'll be keeping this one, 'cause I don't like it at all...


Seen her when she passed by
I mean, in the flash back where I’m back in the past, why..
Does this song cry.. I mean, I should be
I could be, the man of her dreams
But, it seems that love went Houdini on us
You scream, me? I was just being honest
How could you be with another human being, being pompous?
Derailed, broken compass
Always lying, I was dating the US congress
You, as my partner should have been honest
I was walking in the dark, for the longest
My longs hurt, my tongue should curse
Instead, the pen is hurt, bleeds in lead first
Conveying my feelings in this verse
What I felt is what I was concealing in a hearse
I broke the coffin, hence me coughing..
..all my emotions up, while I’m stuck
In this motion of bad luck, my bad, being single pays off
Just ask mainstream rappers
My brain seems to use brain matter to delete you like your presence doesn’t matter
I moved on, that’s all that matters..
So, move on, and if you are? Please do it faster..
That’s what I ask her..
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
- Lupe Fiasco

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Re: Song Cry

Postby Fa-Q » Apr 4th, '10, 22:31

Yea, I don't like that houdini line...there was a couple of good lines here and there like the Broken Compass line....I would keep some if you like any of it....
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