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sumtin i made up

Postby shadddyaftermatth » Jun 19th, '10, 23:51

til i collapse, im bustin out with these raps, thatll ruin your heart, and force you to relapse back onto methadon, vicaden, and anthrax
you couldnt handle me saggin my pants to the devil
spittin raps thatll make even the greatest look up to me, ya not on my level,
dig up sum dirt, toss you in the hole beatin ur family upside the head with a shovel
homie there aint no others to worry about im the one whos bringin the most trouble
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Re: sumtin i made up

Postby Just Silver » Jun 19th, '10, 23:54

Sort of weird flow for the first part when it ended with "anthrax"

and structure is like :confusion:

but overall its good but short
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Re: sumtin i made up

Postby shadddyaftermatth » Jun 19th, '10, 23:58

Just Silver wrote:Sort of weird flow for the first part when it ended with "anthrax"

and structure is like :confusion:

but overall its good but short


haha r u gonna comment on all my stuff :] i already :wub: you
ur soo :flower: friendly haha
im not gay by the way so if u thought i was :facepalm :shakehead: :D
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Re: sumtin i made up

Postby Just Silver » Jun 19th, '10, 23:59

shadddyaftermatth wrote:
Just Silver wrote:Sort of weird flow for the first part when it ended with "anthrax"

and structure is like :confusion:

but overall its good but short


haha r u gonna comment on all my stuff :] i already :wub: you
ur soo :flower: friendly haha
im not gay by the way so if u thought i was :facepalm :shakehead: :D

no lol i probably wont, dont take it personal lol

and im just in a posting mood :coffee:
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Re: sumtin i made up

Postby shadddyaftermatth » Jun 20th, '10, 00:01

Just Silver wrote:
shadddyaftermatth wrote:
Just Silver wrote:Sort of weird flow for the first part when it ended with "anthrax"

and structure is like :confusion:

but overall its good but short


haha r u gonna comment on all my stuff :] i already :wub: you
ur soo :flower: friendly haha
im not gay by the way so if u thought i was :facepalm :shakehead: :D

no lol i probably wont, dont take it personal lol

and im just in a posting mood :coffee:

haha its cool , :spank:<-----hahahahaha loooveee thattt :thumbsup2:
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