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Postby classthe_king » Jul 10th, '10, 14:39

I haven't been checking CW at all so drop links for feed
I bet nobody can explain the first four lines besides Solace and Zu ;)

(Sentus)
Listen to royalty on the mic; I’m the king of the tracks
Yeah, the hottest prints so I’m always bringin the raps
Hip hop’s heir stingin the wack with this filthy fist
And if you try and cool me down you will be missed
I’m the dopest emcee, no ones as focused as me
I’m willing to slaughter whoever approaches the beat
Step back; you’ll get burned too close to the heat
I’m slicin tongues from mouths when they open to speak
I don’t give a fuck, I knocked Stephen Hawkin’ off
His wheel chair and told him its okay, walk it off
I won’t knock it off, I love danger, I’m used to the fun
Hell, I had a staring contest with Medusa and won
I’m a fusion of some of the most gruesome of scum
With the most mutinous tongue spewin this dung
I had a girl who wanted me to take her breath away
So I immediately started removin a lung
I tore through ya with the fire power of a war cruiser
Cause you only actin fly when you’re a sore loser
I’m more used to sittin back then kickin tracks
But now I’m spittin facts so yall wanna get wit that
But fuck all that shit I spit tracks that kill foes
And I couldn’t give a fuck if I gift wrapped a dildo
You wish that my ill flow wouldn’t shred teams
I don’t play soft, you want a face off well I’m Ed Gein
My led seems to devour his I’m done with his shit
And like the father of Albert Fish, I come the sickest
If you fuck with Sentus get ripped like a damn tiger
I’ll always outshine you faggots cause I stand brighter
That’s why future generations will only speak of me
While they are all circled around camp fires
All these fake kings need to quit rapping man
Cause they just stuck in the closet like Prince Caspian
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Re: I'm Back

Postby Ticalrecords » Jul 10th, '10, 16:15

yea i get it

mine wud go like this tho

yo ima think it up on the spot
that paper crumpled up on the top,
flow like pimple pus when it stops
bursting like THAT moment before my pun that gets dropped,

ya feel me? :smoking:
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Re: I'm Back

Postby classthe_king » Jul 10th, '10, 16:20

What the fuck are you talking about
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Re: I'm Back

Postby Ticalrecords » Jul 10th, '10, 16:38

lol Nevermind
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Re: I'm Back

Postby tjb » Jul 10th, '10, 16:51

this is really dope. im lovin it even tho i can explain those lines :y:
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the emcee is me, the host for the night
papa doc, only thing i dont choke on the mic - redman

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lets get this track to number 1!

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Re: I'm Back

Postby classthe_king » Jul 10th, '10, 17:01

Thanks guys
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Re: I'm Back

Postby ChronicJon » Jul 10th, '10, 18:49

The best line was the removing a lung one :laughing:

I liked it, it reminded of me of 99 Eminem. Not saying you jacked his style or bit lines just saying it reminds me of it.

This was realy dope man keep bringing the heat :y:
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Re: I'm Back

Postby classthe_king » Jul 11th, '10, 01:38

Thanks guys
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Re: I'm Back

Postby 77o77 » Jul 11th, '10, 06:33

Dope :y:
Some of your lines reminded me of the "old freestyle" version of em. Those lines i loved the most.

I miss that type of flow. you def, took that switched it up and made it your bitch.lol

Some lines i thought were amazing. if you take a few revisions i think you can really have somethin. :smoking:
I love bein hated, it's great
It let's me know that I made it
I wouldn't have it no other way

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Postby classthe_king » Jul 11th, '10, 16:08

77o77 wrote:Dope :y:
Some of your lines reminded me of the "old freestyle" version of em. Those lines i loved the most.

I miss that type of flow. you def, took that switched it up and made it your bitch.lol

Some lines i thought were amazing. if you take a few revisions i think you can really have somethin. :smoking:


Any suggestions :-k
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Re: I'm Back

Postby Solace » Jul 12th, '10, 02:43

Ticalrecords wrote:yea i get it

mine wud go like this tho

yo ima think it up on the spot
that paper crumpled up on the top,
flow like pimple pus when it stops
bursting like THAT moment before my pun that gets dropped,

ya feel me? :smoking:

No actually, no one feels you.

And that was great, a lot better than just a I'm rusty welcome me back piece, this was fire.
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Re: I'm Back

Postby classthe_king » Jul 12th, '10, 14:54

Thanks my man :worship:
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Re: I'm Back

Postby ThomasJ » Jul 12th, '10, 15:01

This was fucking dope :y:
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: I'm Back

Postby classthe_king » Jul 12th, '10, 23:32

Thanks man, appreciate it
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Re: I'm Back

Postby MikeNUFC » Jul 12th, '10, 23:36

Dont really comment on CW a lot but this was crazy. Some really fucking great mutlies in there, loved the Hawking punchline and picked up on the flow immediately.

I felt it got slightly weaker near the end but with the opening and middle so fantastic it would be pretty hard to keep up all the way through.

Very impressive
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