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Problems...

Postby ThomasJ » Jul 10th, '10, 18:55

I see problems around me everywhere I look
Streets infested with crooks,no perspective,
Kids don't understand how majestic a book is
They sit on they ass all day,expectin' a future
If you ask me,it's stupid,but hey,it's just my thoughts
Cause no matter how many battles we fought,
ain't nothing good that war brought,just a lot of victims
Turn on the TV,all you see is robbings and killings
Addicts popping more pills and,we really need to pull the plug
Instead of gangsters shooting slugs out of moving cars
And it's getting worse by the day,more and more herses
Innocent people dying,politicians lying
Police don't give a fuck bout you unless you wealthy
Hospitals don't take you,no matter how bad your health is
Everything is fucked up,I just watch it from the distance
Wishing it would all change this instant
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Problems...

Postby ThomasJ » Jul 11th, '10, 10:47

Bump?
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Problems...

Postby BILI » Jul 12th, '10, 14:00

It was nice homie,it flowed very well,and I like that concept :y: Keep it up
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Re: Problems...

Postby bennibus » Jul 12th, '10, 15:10

i like it! nice flow.
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Re: Problems...

Postby ThomasJ » Jul 12th, '10, 15:10

Thanks guys! :D
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Problems...

Postby Robbie G » Jul 29th, '10, 20:29

Nice drop

They sit on they ass all day,expectin' a future


This was my favorite line because it's so true. :y:
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