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JustSoYouKnow.. Your On My Mind .. Ft. Solace

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JustSoYouKnow.. Your On My Mind .. Ft. Solace

Postby J Roc » Jun 29th, '10, 05:47

Intro: You ever wanna talk to me , just say hi
You ever wanna be fly as me, Just Stay High
You Ever Wanna Chill With Me, Just Stay High
And i'll Look Out For u with my BloodStained Eyes

Chrous (our views on love)
Solly:
Oh by the way a picture of you is just stuck up in my mind,
Always getting the feeling that just some stuff isn't right,
Can't wrap my head around you, what's this bringing us too?
Oh by the way, just so you know, I'm thinking of you.

Roccy:
Oh by The Way, That Pussy Of Yours Is Just Stuck In My Mind
With Your Legs In the Air While my Tongue Was inside
"Can't Wrap My head Around You,".. But The Opposite Worked
Ur Cherry Broke
Oh by the way, Just So You know That Condom Did First

Verse 1 (J CrackRockz)
I'm "On Top" Like You Was ... u Remember My face?
Who-Was? I Think My Mood-Sucks Whenever i Mention Your Name
Never Woulda Thought This Obsticle Was Possible On a Regular Day
Ur all i thought-about After u Locked-Me-out But Even Heavens Got Gates
But at the End Of The Day? My Love is ever-lasting but Memory's Fade
But It's Obvious She's Hooked, Saying She Had the Role Of Roccy's Bitch Mistook
Reallllly, If 'Love-Is-Blind' That Must-be-why I Can't Compliment Her Looks
This a cry for attention then, Like Eminem Pullin' Mommy's Card
This is MY recovery after me getting off to a Roccy Start
Fuck you, Fuck Your New Guy AND his College Smarts
Fuck His Job, His Race And Fuck His Commi Car
Fuck my Life, Drugs And Fuck Always Talking Hard
I remember the only Tits i saw were on Barbie Dolls
You Misses Me? Fuck that.. i could be Mister. You
Like You dont need to change the name your mother has given you
I just wanted to get the message across that Somebody misses you
And im finally a somebody .......

Chorus (Our View Of Love)
Solly:
Oh by the way a picture of you is just stuck up in my mind,
Always getting the feeling that just some stuff isn't right,
Can't wrap my head around you, what's this bringing us too?
Oh by the way, just so you know, I'm thinking of you.

Roccy:
Oh by The Way, That Pussy Of Yours Is Just Stuck In My Mind
With Your Legs In the Air While my Tongue Was inside
"Can't Wrap My head Around You,".. But The Opposite Worked
Ur Cherry Broke
Oh by the way, Just So You know That Condom Did First

Verse 2 (SolACE'd this verse)
We thought it was meant to be quick see, just ending it quickly,
But the energy in me gets the neverending memories sticking,
We thought it was a fling, like a prick "Oh naw it's just a sting",
No, who would've known what the thought of us would bring?
First as students we met eachother in some grade nine class,
With you the days fly past just having a great time, blast,
The days shined, grass was always greener than ever for me,
More than I thought it ever would be, oh I never would see,
So unfair and judged oh how scared I was just to ask you out,
Slowly but surely coming to me, memories are back in town,
You said "Yes", and with you everyday I knew you'd stay in blush,
It's like the world was constructed perfecly and made for us,
Now I love the way you laugh at every single stupid joke I crack,
The way you like my poetry even though you know it's wack,
The way I feel when we kiss, baby let's chill some other time,
Sad thing it's all in my mind and in reality you're with another guy.

Chorus (Our view of loves)
Solly:
Oh by the way a picture of you is just stuck up in my mind,
Always getting the feeling that just some stuff isn't right,
Can't wrap my head around you, what's this bringing us too?
Oh by the way, just so you know, I'm thinking of you.

Roccy:
Oh by The Way, That Pussy Of Yours Is Just Stuck In My Mind
With Your Legs In the Air While my Tongue Was inside
"Can't Wrap My head Around You,".. But The Opposite Worked
Ur Cherry Broke
Oh by the way, Just So You know That Condom Did First

Outro : You been on our minds ... I Hope We Been On Yours
I Hope You Talk About Us To Your Pets of course
Maybe Only Chilll With Us & Have Your Friends Divorced
Or Atleast Read This Shit, Whut Else Did We Send Them For? :wub:
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Re: JustSoYouKnow.. Your On My Mind .. Ft. Solace

Postby Solace » Jul 12th, '10, 02:27

Lol this deserves something.
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Re: JustSoYouKnow.. Your On My Mind .. Ft. Solace

Postby gutawafang » Jul 12th, '10, 02:33

LOL. wassup with the roccy and solly? :laughing:

I don't like the intro at all.

I don't like songs about sex.

Roc's verses is very complex. Nice read. Love the hyphens and caps.

Verse 2 (SolACE'd this verse) is good. LOL.

Overall, I actually read it twice. Second read made it flow better. :y: And it sounds nicer too.
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Re: JustSoYouKnow.. Your On My Mind .. Ft. Solace

Postby Solace » Jul 20th, '10, 21:46

Appreciate the feed on this Guta, considering it's been weeks and no one but you has left anything. Bump.
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