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Color Blind

Postby R.A.G.E In Darkness » Jul 15th, '10, 03:34

I Hate you or I Love You, Misplace You or then I Touch You
Disgrace You, Or then I hug you, Erase You and then I Thrust you
Unfaithful but then I Trust You, Deflate You and then I Love You
Nothing is there Above You, And everything Said is Subtle
Anger or I'm Happy, Depression or I am Manic
Obsessions just like an addict, Lethargic inside an Attic
Athiest or I'm Theist, Retarded Or I'm a Genius
I'm hardened Inside my Secrets, Or opened for you to See it
Darkened beside A Diary, Harping on my Anatomy
Thinking within my Vanity, Sinking in an Insanity
Heartless and Cold as Iron Man, Sizzling in a Frying Pan
Knowing that I'm dying and, Living within your Crying Hands
Trapped inside a Padded Cell, Freedom within These Walls
When I'm called without sound, to the ground and I'm Al-
-ready, Ready to deal with this Situation that I'm Shown
Color Blind mentality, Black and White in the snow,

I am Color Blind,
To Thoughts, Bipolar Inside my Heart
So I'm Color Blind
Apologize for all that I have brought
And I'm Color Blind
Emotions are like black and white to eyes
I Am Color Blind
Apologize for all my darkened lies x2

Healthy but Sick In The Head, Wealthy but Wishing I'm Dead
Stealthy and Dripping with Red, Help Me, I'm living in Dread
Doctors Can't tell me what's Wrong, Do I Even Belong?
This World is Filled with black and white, but no one's Speaking this Song?
What's wrong? Everything. I feel as if I'm sixty living in death
and everybody else is With Me, Giving MY Breath
It's either Helpfulness or Helplessness, I'm lost in this conundrum
and a Part of Me is Helping It, get Harder cause' of selflessness
Hope in Me is Broken Too, Hopefully I'm Pulling Through
Grey & Black & White Is such horrid thing to See at Noon
Saying I'm Naive is True, Listen, I believe I can
Get away from Black and Grey, and See the Reds and Greens and Blues
All I Need; Believe In Me, and maybe We
Can See the Day Between the Streams of Light Were Teens can Gleam and beam so easily
Color Blind but Not For Long, All I need is just this Song
All along.... all I needed was this Song..

I am Color Blind,
To Thoughts, Bipolar Inside my Heart
So I'm Color Blind
Apologize for all that I have brought
And I'm Color Blind
Emotions are like black and white to eyes
I Am Color Blind
Apologize for all my darkened lies x2
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Re: Color Blind

Postby Robot » Jul 15th, '10, 03:41

I Enjoyed It, I Thought The Second Verse Was Way Better Though. Really Good. :worship:
I never asked, cared, gave a fuck, or wanted opinions.
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Re: Color Blind

Postby Yah-hah » Jul 15th, '10, 04:12

:worship: I Love the writing style it has a nice rhythm and poetic vibe that really shines. I love the opening of the first verse. The multis are so different as in the are not forced they seem so fluent and peotic its a really fresh read :y:
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Re: Color Blind

Postby Dark Blue » Jul 15th, '10, 04:25

i liked this alot :worship:
HATERS If you worked your dreams like you do your mouth - things would happen for you
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Re: Color Blind

Postby Emadyville » Jul 15th, '10, 04:40

I loved the first verse, the 2nd had a different feel but I enjoyed it as well. Very poetic, only thing was the flow on it, but this was well written :y:
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