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Another Quick One

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Another Quick One

Postby Solace » Aug 3rd, '10, 22:53

Worse than the sound of playback of your album and its verses,
Oh, countless times I've raped rap, and your ass is still a virgin,
I tend to send the best writtens, heads spinning like an exorcist,
Son I'm graded the way which Canadian's end their sentences,
Bend some censorships and say "That line you misinterpreted",
Beat the time, eat your rhymes then out I spit that worthless shit,
Bitch I purge it quick, on your face as the dome piece gets the hit,
You say "dog eat dog" because you got your homies licking dick...
Stop throwing hissy fits, lines suck, rhyming raps of blowjob,
Pain, rip out your brain to really leave you mindless as a robot,
Trying to show off what you don't got, you're lame and weak,
Crazily got insane beliefs, because honestly bro you ain't a G...
I'm getting bored with this, it's about time to wipe the floors a bit,
Y'all fucking up the boards with shit, giving birth to rap? Abort it kids...
You got distorted wit, and clearly you're wack. Can you hear me?
I can't hear you, 'cause even reading your lines makes my ears bleed.
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Re: Another Quick One

Postby DƎRDYPK » Aug 3rd, '10, 23:48

say whatttt?


you killing it
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Re: Another Quick One

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 3rd, '10, 23:57

These lines are much too long. I thought the punchlines were out of your comfort zone. Try to concentrate less on rhymes and more on the content. Elevate.
Your brain is child's play to manipulate.
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Re: Another Quick One

Postby Solace » Aug 4th, '10, 00:04

Thanks PK
Sup Spyder/Cole
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