Land Of Dreams

[ThomasJ]

Verse 1 :
I woke up in the middle of a dark,empty room
First thing I noticed was the hard,heavy gloom
A voice,so loud and strong,so ferocious
But yet so gentle,and filled with emotion
Said I should come near,to the bathroom mirror
The lights turned on,and it was much clearer
I approached the glass,and the letters said
"You're next!" right next to a severed head
I turned around,and this creature approached me
It's not human,no way,it's way too ghostly
I began to ran,the lights dimmed and I fell
I screamed,and screamed,and then I felt
A sharp claw,ripping my black sweater
I took a butcher knife,cut it off,it became deader
I was safe,finally,and I laid on the bed
Closed my eyes,and the demon's voice said:

Hook :
Welcome guest,to the land of dreams
Where nothing is really as it seems
You can go crazy over shattering screams
Welcome guest,to the land of dreams

I'd finish this,but it sucks so much LOL

[ThomasJ]

This is actually an insult to hip hop.

[classthe_king]

It reminded me of Demon Inside because of this part

Closed my eyes,and the demon's voice said:
Hook :
Welcome guest,to the land of dreams

Also, don't use words that aren't actually words, like deader.

[ThomasJ]

It reminded me of Demon Inside because of this part

Closed my eyes,and the demon's voice said:
Hook :
Welcome guest,to the land of dreams

Also, don't use words that aren't actually words, like deader.

Thanks for the feed.

[ChronicJon]

Yeah, that part Class said reminded of Demon Inside too.

I liked the verse though Try using a little more multis. Just a little more and you're set

[ThomasJ]

Deader is a word.

[Yah-hah]

First bar was bit shaky rhyme wise. I think I know where you were tryin to go with this peice. Hang in there bro keep it at