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Psych Evaluation (The Stan Chronicles #1)

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Psych Evaluation (The Stan Chronicles #1)

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 4th, '10, 08:07

The story of Stan after he survived the wreck and is now recovering. He didn't face trial due to mental illness. This is just the beginning.

(Intro - Office Noise)
Secretary: Stanley?
Stan: Yeah?
Secretary: The doctor will see you now.
*Door opens
Psychiatrist: Have a seat Stan, relax, and tell me how this all started.

(Verse)
Well back in the day, when my uncle would baby sit
We'd played horsey rides, thinking back it makes me sick
He grabbed my dick, I was 12, and in a living hell where
We were all on welfare, daddy was no help there
Well yeah, one year, he got caught and sent to prison
The damage hidden, I blocked it out, yeah forget it
See these incisions, these scars a crossed my wrist here
Some of them from then, and some of them from this year
Look at this ear, that scar was from a cigarette
Mom gave me a pack of them the week she tried quittin it
Soon forgetting it, she came back wanting the pack
I smoked all but one.......I was 13 and a half
She took the one from the pack, lit it and laughed
Pressed it to my ear and said "Stanley's been bad"
I've hid my past, that crap, caused my heart to shatter
My youth was bad, till the year I found Marshall Mathers
Your brain is child's play to manipulate.
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Re: Psych Evaluation (The Stan Chronicles #1)

Postby Jaz » Aug 4th, '10, 08:11

I like the concept of a continuation of Stan's story.. The rhymes are pretty solid, not quite Eminem level but probably on par with how he wrote "Stan."
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Re: Psych Evaluation (The Stan Chronicles #1)

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 4th, '10, 08:14

Jaz wrote:I like the concept of a continuation of Stan's story.. The rhymes are pretty solid, not quite Eminem level but probably on par with how he wrote "Stan."


I was thinking about writing in Em's style but I just wrote this up and forgot about it. I think when he starts talking about Em I'll incorporate more multies though.
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Re: Psych Evaluation (The Stan Chronicles #1)

Postby Solace » Aug 6th, '10, 14:49

I thought that ending was dope. Good drop, I liked the idea.
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