Can't really complain TBH,especially 'cause you said you write in breaks from your job.
*cough* http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=94745 *cough*
Another 10 bars.
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Re: Another 10 bars.
by ThomasJ » Aug 5th, '10, 20:00
This was very nice IMO.
Can't really complain TBH,especially 'cause you said you write in breaks from your job.
*cough* http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=94745 *cough*
Can't really complain TBH,especially 'cause you said you write in breaks from your job.
*cough* http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=94745 *cough*
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Re: Another 10 bars.
by Peace_Maker » Aug 6th, '10, 07:56
Pretty sick. Make the bars a bit shorter though so you can flow them. The first two lines had a very weird rhyme scheme. The second to last bar wasn't that original but I loved the way you used it, keep it up man.
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