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Let Me Be The One

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Let Me Be The One

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 8th, '10, 13:47

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hDIRZ4lUGNE

I don't want to come in second place once again
Another girl, bad situation, now I'm just a friend
Don't keep me in the dark, open up and let me in
It's cold and harsh, I can't survive the elements
Ain't got the key to ya heart, so leave the door cracked
Or keep a spare and I'll check under the floor mat
I'm on the porch right now, a site, a sore eyed clown
A dream to soar by the clouds, somebody tore mine down
So you're mine now, not a second choice, to tell the truth
We all fell hard at one time from our pedestals
A twist of fate, a lesson in adolescent youth
The light of my life, basking in that special hue
Incredible, I know that love's not a drug
I'd smoke it 5 times a day and probably poison my lungs
The poise when we hug, your head into my shoulder is dug
The effort to release you is a boulder to budge
Don't hold a grudge, just because music is my next crush
Compared to you, it's just a tool to express love
Your brain is child's play to manipulate.
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Re: Let Me Be The One

Postby classthe_king » Aug 8th, '10, 17:35

I really liked this one
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Re: Let Me Be The One

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 8th, '10, 17:40

classthe_king wrote:I really liked this one

The beat is sick. You crossed my mind with the first line....no matter how gay that sounds.
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Re: Let Me Be The One

Postby classthe_king » Aug 8th, '10, 20:24

I could never rap to a beat that up-tempo but yeah, I know what you're talking about and your first line made me think of that line.
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Re: Let Me Be The One

Postby Emadyville » Aug 9th, '10, 19:12

I enjoyed it, was very poetic at parts, especially the beginning, good work :y:
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