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Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby classthe_king » Aug 9th, '10, 01:00

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SSRgeQHJ-7Q

(Coleon)
My spit is measured by megatons, you're kilowatts
I'm breaking down the city blocks, on beat like city cops
You lickin' shots, but nobody listens to you
Puttin' more lead in your lines than a fisherman do
I came...out of the blue, and 'till I'm seen as a vet
Y'all are Nikes with no laces, can't keep me in check
Fiend for respect, it's been hard and I been stressed
Need a rep, then raise the bar like a bench press
I sit stressed, feeling damned, know that I can't win
Blackout, go through more sheets than A Klansman
Gravedancers, cryp-t walk on tomb stones
Average Joes, like BP with the crude flows
Atleast compared to the C to which your damn submarines
An amputee, no feat. still damage the beat
Unless Class is in cession, get ate like after the seven
We'll raid the pastures of heaven and swing an axe at the blessed

(Sentus)
When I first lifted the pen I had made it my pride
And I’ll fuckin spit this shit till the day that I die
I know that I’m dope, in every flow that I’ve wrote
I go for the throat of every rapper known as the goat
Alone with my hope to make it, look it’s my dream
But with the kids it’s all about the hook like Kareem
Another crook I might scream, there robbin the art
So I’m stoppin the hearts of anyone toppin the charts
I’m not goona start with the rappers that make hits
They can’t hold a candle to me so how’s that make sense
You ain’t got the faintest idea of what I’ve been through
Or what type of horrific monster I’ve turned into
I sit behind my heart and soul as I spit these rhymes
As I get to find who’s fake and real in the ‘nick’ of time
Cause with this rap everyone’s begun retreating
I misbehaved at catholic school, none can beat me
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby Element. » Aug 9th, '10, 02:11

classthe_king wrote:
(Coleon)
Fiend for respect, it's been hard and I been stressed
Need a rep, then raise the bar like a bench press

(Sentus)
I know that I’m dope, in every flow that I’ve wrote
I go for the throat of every rapper known as the goat


both verse's i enjoyed readin and the above lines are awesome :y:
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Re: Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 9th, '10, 04:21

I feel like the first guy probably had trouble writing this due to the size of his cock. It's enormous.

Class I liked the verse, you went with a more conceptual feel to the name while the other guy did punches and just touched on it. Smooth flow and the structure of it all was fantastic.
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Re: Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby Solace » Aug 9th, '10, 04:57

Peace_Maker wrote:I feel like the first guy probably had trouble writing this due to the size of his cock. It's enormous.

:laughing:

But yeah. Peace Maker/Coleon, you had a great verse. And Class, you had an average verse in comparison to your previous work but I know why so that's fine for me. But Cole had just shined. Decent Pyromaniacs, last one was best though, when both of you were on the top of your games.
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Re: Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby classthe_king » Aug 9th, '10, 20:20

Thanks guys. And I don't know about you but this beat was screaming for this type of concept to me. Everything I tried to write ended up like this.
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Re: Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby classthe_king » Aug 11th, '10, 00:16

Which one was the last one?
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Re: Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby Solace » Aug 11th, '10, 00:17

Enemies of Mankind
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Re: Pyromaniacs- Blackout

Postby classthe_king » Aug 11th, '10, 00:18

Solace wrote:Enemies of Mankind



Ohhhhhhh yeah, I was trying to do Prince Ea's style on that :laughing:
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