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What you know about this?

Postby classthe_king » Aug 18th, '10, 01:44

I did a lot of research for this verse.


I’ve got you hatin my soul, I’m so sick on the mic
The government released me as population control
I’m sicker than a mutation of the 21st chromosome
My life’s journey was carved on the dropa stones
I spit pure horror known as my lyrical pessimism
Ahead of my time like the Antikythera mechanism
I’ll wreck the system, diss you and then assault ya
My rhymes capture your mind like Project Mk-Ultra
I’m the first to step in the ring when the throne calls
I’m perfect like the precision of Costa Rican stone balls
I won’t fall in battle, I’m known as one with honor
I strike emcees with the force of the sons of Brahma
My verses will get stuck in your head all day n night
Cause every lines crazy like the books of David Icke
I’ve never been one to try and please with sound
So when opportunity knocks I release the hounds
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: What you know about this?

Postby classthe_king » Aug 18th, '10, 02:03

What do you mean by technical?
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: What you know about this?

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 18th, '10, 14:40

Yeah I dig all the conspiracy shit, good to read when ya know all the references :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: What you know about this?

Postby classthe_king » Aug 20th, '10, 01:45

Thanks guys
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Re: What you know about this?

Postby Just Silver » Aug 20th, '10, 01:51

I really liked the flow but i wish i knew more than 50% of it :sweating:
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Re: What you know about this?

Postby classthe_king » Aug 20th, '10, 02:45

Just Silver wrote:I really liked the flow but i wish i knew more than 50% of it :sweating:


Google it, that was the point of this verse ;)
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Re: What you know about this?

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 20th, '10, 20:33

Great piece man but I have to agree with Maybe on the "technical" part. Not saying it wasn't dope, but it just seemed TOO complex for normal people to get, lol. I love how you managed to make all these reference's fit soo smoothly into your rhyme-scheme and overall flow of the verse, that was pretty dope!

Good stuff bro, keep it up!
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Re: What you know about this?

Postby classthe_king » Aug 21st, '10, 04:00

Steve Spag wrote:Great piece man but I have to agree with Maybe on the "technical" part. Not saying it wasn't dope, but it just seemed TOO complex for normal people to get, lol. I love how you managed to make all these reference's fit soo smoothly into your rhyme-scheme and overall flow of the verse, that was pretty dope!

Good stuff bro, keep it up!
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So by too technical he just meant to complex? That's fine with me then lol, that was the goal of this piece. Thanks for the feed.
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