verse I’m working on

[ry`u]

just part of a verse I’m working on at the moment, I wrote these bars though I'm not really sure I want to add them, should I? your thoughts...

these lines they ignite, like flammable thoughts,
nope, not-about-to-give-up
and the haters you lost
see if I give a fuck, now I’m colder than frost
so I block out the pain,
and chose the path that I walk,
and guess until, I shine, I’ma shine in the dark

thanks

[neversnooze]

it was ok ry'u, but i would need to see your verse in order to give you my full thoughts.