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Day 6 (Full song "I wanted")

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Re: Day 6 (Full song "I wanted")

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 19th, '10, 00:14

this is gonna be an awsome song man
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Re: Day 6 (Full song "I wanted")

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 19th, '10, 01:16

Youre the wackest mafucker in CW
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Re: Day 6 (Full song "I wanted")

Postby classthe_king » Aug 19th, '10, 03:21

This is the first day I've read and I honestly had no clue what was going on. But it seems like you're using alot more multis now then normal, maybe our opinions effect you more then you know :shifty: And with the weird way you placed your rhymes I couldn't get it to flow any other way then just straight rapping it with no pauses so I hope you have good breath control.



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Re: Day 6 (Full song "I wanted")

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 19th, '10, 12:44

i think it's pretty good, keep it up. :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Day 6 (Full song "I wanted")

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 20th, '10, 20:23

Great piece man! I love how it matches to the beat soo nicely, I can't wait to hear how you're gonna sound on this! The flow is great, I picture it real laid back but somewhat somber. Lyrics are dope (as usual), and everything seemed intact.

Good work bro, keep it up!
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Re: Day 6 (Full song "I wanted")

Postby B.A.D. » Aug 21st, '10, 09:58

SiiNiDE wrote: I just refuse to use them the same way everyone else on here does,


everyone else?? that sounds to general :angry:
lol

nice piece... would like to see it recorded tho' cuz I get the flow on diferent ways, so only when youre actually rapping it I can understand better

very dark piece... but actually good non the less...
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