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[ThomasJ]

Definitely your best drop yet.
Fucking loved every word of it,you can feel the emotion,also great structure and flow.
Amazing.

[Jay-Hova]

Fantastic display of emotion. You managed to keep it decent lyrically while making a very heart-felt verse. Good job man

My one and only complaint is the "faaas" or the "cuuuu" in the verse because it kinds throws me off. It's kinda like what Eminem did in the third verse of T2M. Cutting himself off at the end of each line cause the words are too many to fit in a line.

But, I don't care the song isn't finished and it seems like an incredible, deep song will be the outcome.

[Devil'sAdvocate]

that was really nice.

[Rollimeo]

that was good

[dR3]

Damn, this was a surprisingly good drop Steve! Didn't know you had such a talent, lol.

You practiced with someone or?

[dR3]

Damn, this was a surprisingly good drop Steve! Didn't know you had such a talent, lol.

You practiced with someone or?

nope i just got inspired by a girl, and i started writing lol, i did another piece for her but i dont wanna show it on here, it was 16bars,


thanks for the kind words people.

Awwww Steve fell in love.

Share that shit dude!

[classthe_king]

This was great but like maybe said the flow kills this. Make the lines much shorter and it would be even better,

[classthe_king]

I don't understand how you rap this? Does these 10 lines make up the whole verse?

[classthe_king]

I still think the lines are too long at some points. It's hard to fit them in the bar.