Lyrics to 2 new songs.

[Boston]

when i read these verses, im feeling em but i rather hear em recorded just because at some points when i read em, i feel like you could transition into the next bar a little better. the rhymes/flow is there along wit the message u tryna get across. let me know when u drop it

[ThomasJ]

The first one was very nice,but the 2nd one just blew me away.
Great work.

[mcZu]

Rhyme wise, the second song was good. But I prefer the first one, solely based on these bars:

once she was a customer, now she has customers
repeating themselves well (just to get a touch of her)
repeat, customers feed her need to breed I mean,
these jerks feed her purse and she's lifting her skirt..
every other binge more distant and hurt.. this isn't her
(no) not that little girl in the picture with curls,
(standing at her daddy's side) like a gift to the world
this is a different girl...

To me, the second song wasn't really good, besides the hook, which I loved. The first song, though, was great, loved the concept, message and way of phrasing. I do agree with Boston on the transitions and rhyming, though. I can somewhat see how you're going to flow, however, the way some rhymes are positioned at certain spots in the verses is making it hard to figure out the flow (I didn't listen to the beats).

[mcZu]

Harsh? No way, I always appreciate constructive feedback, that's why I post. I wouldn't post a verse if I didn't want to have some good feedback. Plus, you were right, I haven't written a verse for a while now. So that was quite the observation.

[Doctor Skittlez]

Damn, Sii, Didn't Know You Were On TR...

First One Reminded Me Of "The Skinny" By Atmosphere. Very Good, Though The Flow Slipped Up A Bit As You Sometimes Had More Odd Bars Than Even Bars...

Second One Was Decent, But The First Was Definitely Better. Second One, The Flow Fell Off ALOT. Nice Bea Choice, Though.

Overall, You're Still Doing Your Thing, That's Chill.

[Solace]

I read Broken Wings. Great work.

pedestrians passing her by, (siloette of a manican asking to die).

I don't know why, but that hit me hard, if you can understand what I'm saying.