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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby ThomasJ » Jul 30th, '10, 20:39

I liked the concept of this a lot,and it was well executed. Good shit guys,keep it up. :y:
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Jul 30th, '10, 21:35

Thank you TJ
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Jul 30th, '10, 23:03

Feed bitches,20 something views and only 1 reply :shakehead:
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Jul 30th, '10, 23:21

Ƨteven© wrote:BILI ur verse is the shit :flutter:

Thx man,always best for my homie :happy: ,you know I think the same about yours,some people didnt even believe you wrote it,cough*SajN*Cough :angry:
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby classthe_king » Jul 31st, '10, 20:38

Both of you had some pretty good rhymes and some good creativity. It was obvious Rhyme Asylum inspired this. Bili you've gotten a lot better even though you jacked the first line from Mc Anonymous :whistle:

And Steven, these are a nooo :shakehead:

Ƨteven© wrote:Steven-

A vast expanse, My desert boots are trapped in sand,
Map in hand, Fighting my way off of this earth,


Heres a quick health tip, Stay the fuck out my face,
Or i might go stealth quick,And warp speed your mind quicker than starships,


Seekin the answers of why we gotta indure the enforcing
Of endorsing the likes of Soulja Boy but divorce.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Jul 31st, '10, 20:40

classthe_king wrote: Bili you've gotten a lot better even though you jacked the first line from Mc Anonymous :whistle:

Where?Are you jk or?I swear I never saw that line,but yes this was inspired by RA,my life is inspired by RA from now,wait till I get on news as a kill...wait what :o

jk ;)
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby classthe_king » Jul 31st, '10, 20:46

BILI wrote:
classthe_king wrote: Bili you've gotten a lot better even though you jacked the first line from Mc Anonymous :whistle:

Where?Are you jk or?I swear I never saw that line,but yes this was inspired by RA,my life is inspired by RA from now,wait till I get on news as a kill...wait what :o

jk ;)


Maybe he never posted it on here and he just showed it to me :-k
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Aug 1st, '10, 13:50

classthe_king wrote:
BILI wrote:
classthe_king wrote: Bili you've gotten a lot better even though you jacked the first line from Mc Anonymous :whistle:

Where?Are you jk or?I swear I never saw that line,but yes this was inspired by RA,my life is inspired by RA from now,wait till I get on news as a kill...wait what :o

jk ;)


Maybe he never posted it on here and he just showed it to me :-k

Prolly,cause I never saw it
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Sep 27th, '10, 00:08

Bumpin this old bitch...dont know why...but I like it :flutter:
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby Solace » Sep 27th, '10, 00:32

What the fuck@your name.
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Sep 28th, '10, 13:01

115 views and only two feeds :coffee:
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby Rain Matrix » Sep 28th, '10, 17:07

both had good drops... some good metaphors and some weak ones

spelling correction- Vein is an vessel that carries blood toward the heart, whereas Vain is having a high opinion of ones self or doing something for nothing

wasn't sure if you caught that... keep dropping
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Sep 28th, '10, 21:45

Rain Matrix wrote:both had good drops... some good metaphors and some weak ones

spelling correction- Vein is an vessel that carries blood toward the heart, whereas Vain is having a high opinion of ones self or doing something for nothing

wasn't sure if you caught that... keep dropping

Yeah it was supposed to be vein...thx man for honest feed :y:
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 28th, '10, 23:36

Was dope for both of you. Steven, the beginning was dope the imagery was really there. I didnt like the ending as much but it was overall alot better than the last joint I saw you in,
Its about time you start writing again BILI, still looks pretty sharp tho man good bars from both of yall :y:
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Re: BILI n Steven - Beat Killers.

Postby BILI » Sep 29th, '10, 00:26

Yah-hah wrote:Was dope for both of you. Steven, the beginning was dope the imagery was really there. I didnt like the ending as much but it was overall alot better than the last joint I saw you in,
Its about time you start writing again BILI, still looks pretty sharp tho man good bars from both of yall :y:

thx man


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