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"Another Day"

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Re: "Another Day"

Postby BILI » Sep 28th, '10, 13:01

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jk...I think it was cool.1st verse is awesome :y: ,also loved that perfect imperfect thing in 2nd verse,it worked,oh and what this means colydascoped?Chours is my thing tho :worship: ,I dont know how you did it,but I sang it and it sounds dope.Only thing I mind is flow,I lost it few times,prolly cause I dont read it like you rap it.

Reminded me of Cashis-Just Another Day...Ima go listen to that song again,it used to be my joint :y:
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Re: "Another Day"

Postby BILI » Sep 28th, '10, 16:45

thx for clearing that for me :y:

its also a bump for you :D
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Re: "Another Day"

Postby Solace » Sep 28th, '10, 21:23

And also pretty dope.

tell me everything you see... tell me this tell me that
from the scars on your wrist soaking in the barrowed bliss
to the broken wings tatted on your back (appropriatly)
and most of me is here but it's scattered with the facts,


I was talking with the crayons and the chalk
and I was asking what they want and what they wanted
was to draw a picture perfect me perfectly imperfect
and impervious to working with a manual, a manuscript


Are both probably my favourite parts. :y:
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Re: "Another Day"

Postby Solace » Sep 29th, '10, 00:04

Entire thing was enjoyable, I just felt those two parts stuck out to me for some reason. :b:
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